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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2006-02-26 10:45 AM

Incredible

Trying to find some
mountainous height
along the valleys
and the swells
some glory road
to make things right
some stream to draw
a parallel
some birds and bees
creating life, in their own
way, to connote, some blackest line
held just right,
cutting through this loss,
this strife

Incredible
becomes the sound
in all ways I hear
its mean
no hole for this head,
no not shuttering these eyes

no, the masque comes off
but the spine remains
paralyzed

Far away this fetch
of what was held
so dear
against my own
this grieving wind
I sense your losses
near

far away from serene
ain’t no mountain high enough
less some valley seem
a place where we could fall in
pretending ‘twas all a dream…

for we would see
in each other’s eye
the pain within the gleam.

Then, ‘tis on this other side
of incredible you stand
adjective of choice
for us
on our journeys

hand in hand.

For the pleasures
that once gave buoy
now repairs to some
deepness of the well,
‘tis in this darkest dank,
this wet sound grows to
forfeit, sure
as some of what ‘twas joy
remains,
to buoy us away
from some infernal, fiery
grim torture.

~*~

Trust me, she knows.

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Martie

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1 posted 2006-02-26 12:49 PM

Sissie

Incredible is you!

iliana
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2 posted 2006-02-26 02:58 PM

"far away from serene
ain’t no mountain high enough
less some valley seem
a place where we could fall in
pretending ‘twas all a dream…"

Tremendous write, SIL. Really like this!

....jo

The Lady
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The Southwest

3 posted 2006-02-27 05:52 PM

You do amazing work Sunshine...

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

4 posted 2006-02-27 07:49 PM

This is fantastic. Hope you are doing well.

Buttons
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since 2006-02-27

Posts 34

5 posted 2006-02-27 08:04 PM

Wow!  So lyrically you express the ups and downs.

    far away from serene
ain’t no mountain high enough
less some valley seem
a place where we could fall in
pretending ‘twas all a dream.

         Buttons

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

6 posted 2006-03-01 09:00 AM

as some of what ‘twas joy
remains,
to buoy us away
from some infernal, fiery
grim torture.

Sometimes keeping slip from our tenuous grip on sanity. *S*

Superb write, my friend. *S*

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2006-03-01 11:07 AM

this brought chills to the flesh and tears to the heart...

yes, supurb indeed!

JL
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Texas, USA

8 posted 2006-03-01 02:03 PM

"ain’t no mountain high enough"

Beautiful words of truth in your poetry.
JL

.......................................
(I'll have that song in my head all day)

Ratleader

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9 posted 2006-03-01 03:57 PM

Incredible.....or perhaps this man might suggest a better name, given the way it has affected me in the half dozen times I've read it, since you posted.....Indelible.

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icequeen
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since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

10 posted 2006-03-02 12:36 PM

This is just too magnificent, Ms. Shine It is so good to read your work again. I'm rolling in it!

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

Kathy
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since 2006-02-10

Posts 153

11 posted 2006-03-02 12:41 PM

Your command of language is..."Incredible"!

Thank you for this very enjoyable write Sunshine.

Hugs,
Kathy

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2006-03-02 12:46 PM

I have been looking for this.

thank you Kathy, for putting right up there.

incredible...

think of what that means, tho.

Wow.

I see things every day, that have the credibility of my own lyin' eyes, and yet?

I'll curl up in the lap of this.

Marsha

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Maidstone Kent England

13 posted 2006-03-02 10:54 AM

Kari this is indeed incredible and so are you darling girl.

Thought I'd drop you a dash of pink into your well of blue, take care and remember darling one that the sun shines bright, ever and always and you do dearest one you do

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy
x x x

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Susan Caldwell
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Florida

14 posted 2006-03-02 12:35 PM

"Far away this fetch
of what was held
so dear
against my own
this grieving wind
I sense your losses
near"

yes...I feel them as well.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

15 posted 2006-03-31 01:32 AM

'incredible', indeed...

I enjoyed this...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

passing shadows
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displaced

16 posted 2006-03-31 04:13 AM

every line
touching

Neeraja
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17 posted 2006-04-01 02:39 AM

How beautiful...

Neeraja

miscellanea
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OH

18 posted 2006-04-01 02:02 PM

for we would see
in each other’s eye
the pain within the gleam

misc'e

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