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jinx26 Junior Member
since 2005-12-12
Posts 38Jersey |
I am Lost in a place where time stands still.... In a scene where.... I dance through the clouds.... Shooting stars.... Pass the moon.... In the mist there's a man.... Who stands in silence.... I linger there.... Unable to breath.... Heart in hand.... Watching as the scene plays out.... A place I go and know he has been.... The ending always the same.... His lips whisper good bye.... The tears fall from my eyes.... I've been unable to cry, even on that awfull V-day. I watched as my girlfriend had a melt down over her (cupcake). I should have cried, Still my eyes were dry, But in my dreams they spout waterfalls. Is there a meaning behind this? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What I love about your work is even before I open it I know I am in for an adventurous read. (I confess I found the use of the elllpses distraction, but I think I understood the punctuation was incorporated to capture the dreamlike quality.) In your particular case, though, I think there is always a dreamlike quality inherent in your work. This one had a more peaceful quality to it however. And as for the questions? I'm not sure if they were meant to be answered by anyone but yourself. I always enjoy the read, Lee.  Drop me a line and let me know how your project is coming along.  |
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jinx26 Junior Member
since 2005-12-12
Posts 38Jersey |
I know the answers but still i refuse to see all that will be the end of me Lee thank you jinx |
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