Open Poetry #37 |
A Deep Blue Sea (a valentine warning to all those hard to get types):-) |
StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
I said I was a deep blue sea, she said I was a pit. I said your gentle on my mind, she said she didn't give a well you know I've loved some ladies, but never one like her. I said I was an old hound dog, she said I was a cur. It was love poems, neath the pale moon last night. I asked her for a little kiss, and to hold me tight. She said, "Thanks for the laugh, that was funny as heck, but I don't think your playing, with an entirely full deck. I said,"Listen here you saucy wench!" I thought I'd try another approach. I'm too shy to repeat it all, but her reply ended with,"cockroach!" I said,"Simmer down hon, or you might spoil the mood." She said,"Tell me, What planet are you from dude?" I can tell she's warming up to me though, her knuckles ain't so white. And the twitching of her eyes, has slowed down just a mite. Now she don't use the back door, everytime I ring her bell. Just the thought of it, make my heart begin to swell. I said I was a deep blue sea, she said I was a pit. I said your gentle on my mind, she said she didn't give a well, you know thats been years ago, our courtin days have past. Now I'm her number one, and shes my better half. When love comes knockin, you can run but you can't hide.:-) [This message has been edited by StevenS (02-12-2006 08:39 AM).] |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This brought such a smile to my face, great writing StevenS Andrew |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You have been missed here Steven.. This is way too funny. And a Happy Valentine's Day to you and yours! Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Persistent dude, aren't you? I got a smile and a chuckle, and those two things have been missing me, lately. Thank you for this, Steven. |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Thank You Andrew, I'm glad I made you smile. :-) Thank Dear Enchantress, I'm more of a loner than I like to admit. I still love to drop by and read even when I'm not posting. Consider the chuckles a return on all those you've invested in me. Thanks again. Thank you too Dear Sunshine, You know what they say...persistence makes perfect, or something like that. The good thing about sunshine is no matter how dark the night we can always depend on it's return. I'm glad I could part the clouds if only for a moment. :-) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Steve!! So good to see you! I almost didn't read it because I'm not hard to get. The only part of the poem I believed was, "I said I was deep blue sea" Yep, you are! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very funny! Some of us are even harder to get than we even make out Hope you catch that gal, don't forget to tell us how you do. |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Thanks Martie, Shhhh don't tell anybody but...it was actually the other way around. :-) Ouch!...just kidding hon! Thanks Mysteria, your comment reminds me of playing chase with my childhood girlfirend. If she couldn't run fast enough to catch me I had to fall down. :-) HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY TO ALL! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I needed a good laugh today...thanks for the great write... |
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Air Goddess Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 108Canada |
And you Steven, have managed to capture with words, the timeless steps of the ultimate flirtatious dance of man and woman. |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Steavenr,Just to know this little rhyme caused a laugh or two is thanks enough. Glad you enjoyed! :-) Air Goddess, a dance indeed! Lets all watch out for our toes! :-) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Now I'm her number one, and shes my better half." Your poem made me laugh outright and LOUD! I love it Steven. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Loved this! |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Thank you Lady, your laughter is music to my ears. :-) Thank you iliana, :-) |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
wow, opposites do attract, enjoyed reading , I like the surprise at the end~ ~ARH |
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desert-spike Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 194TX/USA |
oh that was wonderful. That's the best bare bones courting poem I've ever read. Very amusing too. |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
Oh...very clever indeed! Kathy |
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starinthedark Junior Member
since 2006-02-13
Posts 32 |
We woman and are hard to get approach....lol Guess she caved...loved it, made me laugh. ty Starinthedark* |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Thanks Everybody, your comments make all the empty page head banging worthwhile. :-) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
how funny! thanks for the grins, Steven |
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