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BlueTattoo New Member
since 2006-02-12
Posts 1 |
Intent on a clutter of college ruled, absorbed in ink and smudges of thought, I never noticed her in the doorway, hopeful in a hopeless red dress- write this down, she said; write this down so you'll listen, so you'll hear what I got to say the same way I hear you when you put in words the flat of this dismal sky; it makes me feel damp on my skin, taste lonely at the back of my throat and I know you think I don't know much about words, or just how them words make you happy when nothing else can, but I understand well enough, I get it when I read "nothing grows here but water" so write this down, and listen: I want to live out loud; I want to be more than what I am, I want to sit in one of them outside cafe's sipping mint juleps like ladies do in Atlanta; I want to wear my hair up in curls, silk on my back, smell anything besides magnolia and tobacco and dirt- I need to tell my daddy that the best look at God is from hell, not a pulpit and I need to let my momma see what she closed her eyes to at night; I need to learn how to cry and remember that tears is just so much salty water. I have to chip out what's been covered in stone. I want to read on them pages someday that maybe I was special; that you noticed how I held you, your sap still on my hands, while you twisted uneasy in sleep. Let me see it put down that you thought I was pretty, hair the color of honey off the comb, skin like butter. Paint me in a poem that will find its way out of here- She caught her breath with a hitch, a sound so small that I bent to catch it. Her fingers fluttered, familiar against her neck; she turned, walked away without another word- her gardenia talc lingered long after she'd gone. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to Passions BlueTattoo  This is an excellent first post, I just love the imagery that you conveyed. A very enjoyable read. Andrew |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dear Blue Tattoo - You've got a new fan. You caught me from the first, and kept me throughout. Please, check your email for a very special greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something in blue always draws my attention and ink too, enjoyed it welcome to the den of piptown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! WELCOME TO PASSIONS! This is a wonderful entrance piece! I shall be looking forward to more of your words. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter, |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Excellent write.... Welcome I look forward to reading more. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Paint me in a poem that will find its way out of here- What a powerful, poignant plea... With a poetic debut like this, I'll definitely be looking for more of your work! *S* Welcome to Passions! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Let me see it put down that you thought I was pretty, hair the color of honey off the comb, skin like butter. Paint me in a poem that will find its way out of here-" Oh! I love your voice! Wonderful poem. Welcome. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, I shall enjoy reading more from your pen! Welcome, and thank you for such an amazingly fine first fare! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...James |
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