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The Meaning of This of Sort of Odd Thing
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The Meaning of This of Sort of Odd Thing |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina 
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The Meaning of This of Sort of Odd Thing Odd it is to be an oddity like me. I walk upon bridges that do not ascend over water. I talk to the mirror that does not reflect my image. I see the sky but never look upwards. I decree that I cannot make a decision. I am the real pretender. I am the meaning of this sort of odd thing. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I love the paradox and the images and the ambiance, you odd thing, you! How odd it would be not to be odd! For me, the only thing that detracts from the poem is your use of the word, "ascend" as "ascend" is a movement upwards. I would have preferred "crosses" or "stretches over". If I offend you with this, ignore this paragraph. Welcome to Passions in Poetry! I haven't been here long, but have been so welcomed that I know that nobody will take offence if I behave as though I have been here for ages. It is a wonderful forum to be in - the best I have ever encountered - and I don't say that lightly. - Owl |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Welcom to PIP!!! This is an interesting piece to start with. I like the fact that it can serve as an introduction as well. I look forward to seeing more from you. Cheers! -majnu |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Thank you OwlSA and majnu. Such a warm reception! And of course it doesn't offend me OwlSA; I welcome constructive criticism. And by the way, that is a good point; I will change that. Thanks for the advice. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
My pleasure, Edward Grim. Glad I didn't offend you. - Owl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Edward. I love the paradox nature of this poem, and look forward to more of your writing! I hope you find Passions in Poetry to be a home worthy of your talents. "There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS EDWARD!! I so much enjoyed your entrance post! I'm looking forward to reading more of your words. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Revised Poem: The Meaning of This of Sort of Odd Thing Odd it is to be an oddity like me. I walk upon bridges that do not cross over water. I talk to the mirror that does not reflect my image. I see the sky but never look upwards. I decree that I cannot make a decision. I am the real pretender. I am the meaning of this sort of odd thing. Thanks Owl, I like the revised one better. And thanks for the warm welcome from everyone here at PIP; I'm happy to be here! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Edward....I do those same things! Enjoyed your poem! Welcome to Pip!! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
nice intro, welcome to the blue edward |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*nodding* a fine piece, I love this. Welcome to PIP! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I enjoyed that mirror line. Welcome to Passions! |
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