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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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eco myths? furiously paced coincidence with animated chocking streams of death rounds like snow against a windshield at breakneck speed pushes ideas, with fingerless hands a built in strobe, confirming black sentiment, of some nauseating swirl of vertigo dropping anchor, in a fast paced lethal practice, of clouds mortal remains of mind's eye, electromagnetic mouthfuls of fire, searing a hole in the arms of existence…flushed smiling features slapping pressure squeezed tendrils into the air like Dante’s Inferno, revised harsh black fluid, ripping spigots of stench into greeneries, while slumped against the wall lay care mutating….like a cable channel of smoke, fogging oppressive heritage perhaps the prophecy of cautionary notes swirling in the lungs of the whispers DNA a shadow man the savage killer, beautifully laced within moors of blood-shot eyes unbuttoning the blouse of broken breath peering through the cracks of what used to be's clean air footsteps fell to man's iron workmen, compost of an unknown murder in a world where fear creates living subjects hated for lighting up...the twisted truth of second hand smoke, lies within the heritage of meltdowns the world has misplaced light where storms are fueled by climatic crisis of some carbinated war...chemical spills, black tarred oceans, stream stocking soapsuds greenspan will eventually be the name of the politician |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
This is breath-taking..breathing hard, the flow and intensity is awesome... will return later and read slowly...Maybe I'll read "Howl" in the mean time to build up my lungs...  Later----------ice ><> |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
BRAVO!!! This poem deserves careful reading...it paints such vivid passion with each line...Stunning...*big hugs* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dante's Inferno, indeed. You always seem to manifest a slow roll and build then a head of steam as the train of words hurries toward the end of the line. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
LeeJ I came back to savor, to let the words swish in my mouth, a fine wine it is in structure, though the story is course like 20/20, the subject is a bitter one, but poetically it is a fine Zinfandel blush. In particular, I liked this part... "...like a cable channel of smoke, fogging oppressive heritage perhaps the prophecy of cautionary notes swirling in the lungs of the whispers DNA a shadow man the savage killer, beautifully laced within moors of blood-shot eyes unbuttoning the blouse of broken breath peering through the cracks of what used to be's clean air footsteps fell to man's iron workmen, compost of an unknown murder in a world where fear creates living subjects hated for lighting up.." In general, I liked it all... ------------ice/ford ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Ice, many many thanks for your twice eyes... I wrote this in regards to several documentries I watched, one inparticular, about an unknown sea algea which was taking over the ocean, and unknown to man at the time, was introducted by man...it grew at such an alarming rate, and was so toxic, all the fish left...then I heard about our great trees out west, and how toxins from fuel and polution are slowly killing them to, how polution waves across the earth, like a giant invisible ocean...reaping a slow death to all things...opens a new can of worms in my mind about cancers and other diseases. Startime...thank you for taking the time to read and comment, you bring pink color to these ol cheeks. Hugs Sunshine...what can I say? Its how I think and those thoughts sometimes jumble into a train, which takes me into many questionable stops and starts...I've been told by many, my poems are way to long...and so, even though they kick and scream at me to stop...I don't want to...hehehehehe...but I think you already know that about me...thanks lovely lady for looking.... Hugs |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write! Eric |
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