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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-12-17 11:24 PM

The sudden sting
when twilight faded,
and the running colors
that warmed the shoulders
of the loveless,
no longer spread
illusions
of warm tomorrows,
but sang instead,
the walking wounded's
choir, as branches
stiffened,into rows
of wooden soldiers,
waving fists of fury,
marching on
the dead calm
of the sky.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-18-2005 11:30 AM).]

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2005-12-17 11:30 PM

SweetInkyOne~
Poignantly powerful are your thoughts~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - noles1@totcon.com

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

2 posted 2005-12-18 02:22 AM

excellent.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

3 posted 2005-12-18 01:30 PM

Really liked this.

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

4 posted 2005-12-18 02:58 PM

Your words paint a picture of unsurpassed beauty. You are a brilliant poet. Thank you for sharing your sweet words. - Ed Grim

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2005-12-18 03:13 PM

you've captured that sting, perfectly. nice work m

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

6 posted 2005-12-18 03:31 PM

Brilliant indeed. These words sounded good singing through one's heart.

Keep it up.

"The moon ain't romantic, it's intimidating as hell". -- Tom Waits, 'Bad Liver and a Broken Heart'

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2005-12-18 03:52 PM

I don't know why, but this poem brought to my mind, these words...
*
Just after sundown
They gather in dance halls
Walking wounded with

4-F soldiers, on barstools
Fists raised, holding out dollars.
*
It does not do the poem justice at all, which is BTW, very good..

Its face value deserves a much better reply...But this is the scene that jumped into my mind when I read it.

Hope you are not offened...
I really did enjoy it
_____   ______ice
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><>

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

8 posted 2005-12-18 03:53 PM

AWESOME !!!!!!!!!

loved it

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2005-12-18 03:58 PM

Excellent Michele...much enjoyed this piece
as I do all your work.
Hugs~Nancy

~Let peace begin with me...

shades of paul
Member

since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

10 posted 2005-12-18 04:56 PM

A vivid poetic writing,keep up the good work..Paul

shades of paul,peace,love,and happiness

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2005-12-18 05:23 PM

You could turn carrying rubbish to a rubbish bin into a beautiful poem! You turn sadness into joy. Beautiful poem.

- Owl

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2005-12-18 06:23 PM

I miss the sun too, Michele

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