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Dragonseed
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Dragonseed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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For better and for worse it is a kindred of become the 'biz' of the greatest show there is was and never ever-bees abuzz the greatest show that ever was almost written perfectly turning corners in my mind-- the heroine was left behind (the heroin was left behind) and my strokes of keys are pleas veiled behind the lids of my pupils begging lessons bleed from iris spears across the sky chase the feet of dragonseed walk circles of maternity shimmering the algae veil for better and for worse it is-- (what bastard child is this?) It is a circle ever widening... beaches ever narrowing swallowing the greed I need shells to leave behind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang lady what an ending! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
OMG, oh WOW speechless smack me in the face why don't ya.. sigh Brilliant M'Lady mxx drove me like a magnet |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and my strokes of keys are pleas veiled behind the lids of my pupils begging lessons bleed from iris spears across the sky ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh girlie.... you rock, you rock, you rock ...   Writers try to capture the exhilaration of Nature & inspiration of Love. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Agree with what JM said and a from me. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
quote: serenity, this is precious and awesome. i wanna keep this to savour this stanza over and over again! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
While the above stanza is magnificent, this was the one that drew my attention ~*~ chase the feet of dragonseed walk circles of maternity shimmering the algae veil for better and for worse it is-- ~*~ possibly because of the veil of it...  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Ummm... I am unsure whether I just read this or not... Could there be something this good on PIP? It seems so unlikely. *Stunned* Unique and perfect. Constructive critiques! You dont need critiques, not if this is your usual fare! "the heroine was left behind (the heroin was left behind)" I love this pairing! How do you do it? "And the sun went down, and the stars came out far over the summer sea, But never a moment ceased the fight of the one and the fifty-three." |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Amazing!!! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
chase the feet of dragonseed walk circles of maternity shimmering the algae veil for better and for worse it is-- You are magnificant! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"It is a circle ever widening... beaches ever narrowing swallowing the greed I need shells to leave behind." Fantastic write Ser!!! Hugs YOU! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...Yep...The hurricane season is here again... Take Care and be safe. You sure have a hell of a way of writing, but thats a good thing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"For better and for worse it is a kindred of become the 'biz' of the greatest show there is was and never ever-bees abuzz" this stanza made me think of marriage... "and my strokes of keys are pleas veiled behind the lids of my pupils begging lessons bleed from iris spears across the sky" made me think of all the ways we (people in general) cry out for help and are never heard... "strokes of keys are pleas" freakin' brilliant! love you. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
almost written perfectly turning corners in my mind-- the heroine was left behind (the heroin was left behind) That part it sticks to me....enjoyed the rest of course... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
V I V I D ! in awe.......jojo |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
UH-OH |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The Goddess plants in each and every one of us that same dragonseed that when cared for by an open mind and heart eventually let's us really know ourselves. Although we leave things behind it is all part of the spiritual process that puts us in sync and connects us to all life forms including the Earth Goddess Gaia herself. Not unlike that very dragonseed, you possess not only the strength, and knowledge, but the power to control this process even if during, you will need and bleed Did that make sense? In a nutshell, trusting one's instincts gets the job finished. So? Am I close?Loved this by the way. |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
This and more is why I keep coming back Thank You K for touching my soul tonight it's weary and heavy from to many things to count... Love, T How do you tell when you're out of invisible ink? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Forgive my tardiness? Thanks all, for reading. Hand*over*heart curtsey...  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
i repeat....Brilliant!! gosh, you collapse me. sigh m'lady, just sighhh mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
this touches an awesome write My spirit will rise |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Oh wow...magnificent!! I was captivated...I must say! Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ok what I have to say about this is probably way off mark and my comments would be edited . . . BUT . . . but behind the lids is what got me, K behind those lids . . . heavy hidden darkened deep deep lids you know what I mean? (loved this btw, it took me to lots of places) |
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Magician Member
since 2002-08-14
Posts 126 |
Wow......always. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i'm going to let this simmer and inspire me, thank you. violet kindly, amelia |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Thank you also for bring Amelia out of the woodwork with your inspire too! Came to read it again, and read it an entirely different way, but then that is what Geminis do to ya. Awesome lady! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
You never cease to amaze me... Miss you, Karen... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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