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Magician
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since 2002-08-14

Posts 126

0 posted 2005-07-26 10:55 PM

When sorrow rang
And tears flooded the valley
Storms crossed their eyes
With flashes of lightning
As thunder echoed inside
The mountains were laid low
And the torrent filled the streets
When sorrow sang soft and sweet

Hands were raised up
In their fruitless plea
Tremble, the unfaithful servant
One and all in their shame
Upon the land once abundant
Vain washing of filth away
Defiled with all their wanton weep
When sorrow sang soft and sweet

Blind the guardians were
As doom stole in through the night
Footsteps haunted by wailing cries
Too late for the mourner’s lament
To kill the anguish inside
Only darkness that follows their feet
When sorrow sang soft and sweet

When sorrow rang
In countless voices, dirges unheeded
The flood of countless tears
Washes not the stains away
Of a thousand tortured years
But drowns all together in death’s deep
When sorrow sang, soft and sweet

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-07-26 11:00 PM

I'm hearing music everywhere tonight.

I confess that the title didn't "grab" me, but the poem did. Well-written, with a soft, angst and flow that I found compelling.

Enjoyed.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2005-07-26 11:01 PM

when gaia cries
she tells no lies

am keeping this, to read again later
thank you, magician

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

3 posted 2005-07-27 01:35 AM

nice words, loved this~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2005-07-27 09:47 AM

this is awesome...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-07-27 10:24 AM

Excellent write...good to read you again!

Hugs~Nancy

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2005-07-27 12:18 PM

Very well done!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2005-07-27 01:04 PM

whoa, this was ultimately magnificant writing...elegant, gut wrenching, wanting more...BRAVO

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2005-07-27 04:14 PM

WordMagician~

You've totally captured me with this penning~
It tops out as my best read of the day~
(that's going some distance !)

And this -

'When sorrow sang soft and sweet'

- could easily be a beautiful title~

Thank you, thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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