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A Depth Of Tablet
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A Depth Of Tablet |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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A Depth Of Tablet If I look with a thousand-yard stare this tablet turns transparent, or so my eyes start to pretend. Deep without surface, an illusion of blue threads floats suspended, skinny, dimensionless as ink within a yellow depth of no surface. Minutes waddle by like pregnant cats until my ever-growing blind spots break the lines, here, there, wipe in a shifty blankness that deteriorates as it all fades back to a tablet again. My mind can only fill in generalities, background from the yellow tesseract the nerves throw together. I would be a bad graphic artist, working a photograph, trying with indifferent success to mouse a pervert uncle out of the wedding pictures, and with a little slip spoiling the bride’s gown. Still I see for a moment and in inappropriate colors one tiny panorama, an inadequate view of the threads of spirit as they reach and stretch, and sometimes, touching, cling if only for a moment before the page springs flat, gone back to dye and cellulose, daring me to tell what I’ve seen. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-23-2005 12:05 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
My mind can only fill in generalities love that line... too tired at the moment to tell you what else I thought wonderful about your writing ... M |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Sometimes it is possible to travel beyond what seems to be, into a place beyond ordinary....like this: "It mattered not that warm sweet wind came with the slice that cut me thin I knew the breath was born from bone that crossed through veil of time unknown" You have done that in this poem and taken me with you.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your poem isn't just magnificent... it inspires other talented pens. *S* I would be a bad graphic artist, I sincerely doubt you'd be bad at anything you attempted... but if, in fact, you would be a bad graphic artist, that's one tiny lack in your immense well of talent. *S* And here... you paint with pen... such vivid images fitting perfectly into a whole that makes me long to be such a poet. *S* Excellent!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When a poem stays with me for a few hours, I know I've found a treasure... when it stays with me for several days... when images from it slip into my mind to make me smile or simply think a while... it's the rival of Fort Knox. *S* This brought back so many memories... of times nearly forgotten when clothes acquired another color so they'd seem newer for another school year... and of eggs getting a color bath to be pretty for the Bunny not so many months ago. *S* Swirls of color have always fascinated me... but never could I imagine pulling such depth from my ponderings as you've done here. And the tablet I see most often these days mutes colors into shades of gray. *S* Such depth... such delight... *S* "Minutes waddle by like pregnant cats"... That has to be one of the best lines I've read!!! *S* Fantastic! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this one ALOT. -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
A piece of art, indeed! SG |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It has been said, "a piece of art"... yet what you did, was brave the monster that eats words. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ed, one for the books! How you do this, I will never know! How do you perceive such detail among the transparent? The answer must be that you are a true to life dreamer, artist, poet... A keeper to re-read when I look at the blank paper and into the distance! Easy to relate to this... miscellanea |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
"Your poem isn't just magnificent... it inspires other talented pens" (Suthern) ~ I agree you are most inspiring..... In your light I learn how to love |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ed, This one has special meaning for me. You describe a problem I have in perception and expression, although, you seem to meet the challenge with sheer excellence! miscellanea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nodding with understanding here Ed. Lately I'm afraid to write--I never know what will come out. (I only type the stuff, actually.) Much enjoyed... |
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