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A new moon will come.
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A new moon will come. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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With practiced pins she has tacked your silouette to the back of my door you are only a paper moon creation though it feels like something of flesh is watching (over) me (as I bathe in her sea salts, healed) in underscores brazen but fruitless. You will be sewn finally the first and last draft and clothed in my skin. You won't be timeless but worn falling apart too tight and unforgiving to my shape and I will lay you on my sill to feed you a gemstone cleansed the moonlight, once you are sewn to my organs healed an orchestra you will find in the pitch black of a void playing back the years we have been somewhere in-between of life and death. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gem, this is a thick one . . . First reminded me of and I don't know why when Peter Pan lost his shadow and then I see Earth embody you, the moon, she watches -as others are watching too - celestial . . . and sounds to me like either you are renewing yourself or someone else or maybe both. Beautiful. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
gemjop...Enjoyed very much. Flowed like a gentle stream...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
A strong poem... feels like a searching poem. Nice work. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You will be sewn finally the first and last draft and clothed in my skin. You won't be timeless but worn Sighhhh...YESSS yessss yes...exactly that. Perfectly said. Happy New Year! Library Mxx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Perhaps I am giving more meaning to a beautiful stream of consciousness poem than you intended – or perhaps I am completely off track with my interpretation, but the pathway in the moonlight beckoned to me and I couldn’t help but wander down it. The poem suggests to me that the new moon coming in the title will be a good thing. In other words, you will get through a difficult time. It has the ambiance (for me) of “This too shall pass.” It feels to me as though the “she” that put the picture up on the back of your door is your mother.or perhaps your grandmother – I think when you were a little girl. Why would she do that? Perhaps because it was a particularly expressive picture, perhaps because it was of something you particularly liked, or perhaps it was something she felt would comfort you, or take away your possible fear of the dark, or perhaps just because it was the right size for the back of your door. The drawing pins (tacks) have been used before (practiced) which means that you have always (often/almost always) had a picture on the back of your door. This again suggests a caring mother or mother figure. The picture really is of the moon, but you see it as a Greek or Roman goddess, or a mother figure (perhaps a symbol of the very mother or grandmother who put up the picture) or a guardian angel. Whichever, it brings you peace. Perhaps the silhouette really is a silhouette, but perhaps you are looking at it in the dark and it only appears to be a silhouette. The bathing in “her sea salts” I don’t think is literal – or even directly relating to the picture (or perhaps it is – the picture could be a picture of the moon over the sea). I think it is a cared-for feeling (healed) – part of the new moon coming and the healing process - translated into an image of the embrace of water and depending on the salt content, sea water supports the body more than ordinary water. I am not sure what to make of : in underscores brazen but fruitless. Perhaps like an imagined dance with sensual overtones, but a dance on your own and so with no effect on anyone else. I think that: You will be sewn finally the first and last draft and clothed in my skin. could be that you will embody the guardian angel moon and take on her characteristics of caring and healing yourself and others. I think that “the first/ and last draft” refers to your first and final (developed over a period of time) impression/ interpretation/ concept/ understanding of or relationship with the picture. I think that not being timeless and being worn and falling apart and being too tight and not suiting your shape is referring to the fact that the guardian angel will become real within you. You are not putting her on a pedestal and out of your reach. You are not seeing her as an icon, a heroine, an ideal, but as a being of flesh and blood and warmth and imperfections. “Laying you on my sill”, brings to mind smoothing out a piece of treasured material. “Feeding you” suggests to me feeding of a delicate bird. I think you are saying that the moonlight is the cleansed gemstone. Being sewn to your organs I think is emphasizing what I think you said earlier – that the moon will become you as you will become the moon. I think you are saying that not only will you become healed, but the moon will also (but I am probably wrong about the moon being healed). I think that the last two stanzas tell of replaying in peace and beauty and from a position of strength and courage and confidence, the years comprising peace and hell and all the in-betweens. Thank you for my meander through the moonbeams fraught with such beauty and sensitivity. - Owl |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
gem, i've always loved your words, and i apologize that it took so long to realize how much i love you(i'm a procrastinator)  |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Gorgeous!! beautiful...this just...is beyond words If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
this is a most haunting poem; ive read it several times and cannot really put into words, but i find it spellbindingly beautiful, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My oh my! Just look at the wonderful replies that you have received! ~ and all the thought that went into them! Look how it affected our wise owl from SA! This is a masterful piece of writing, Dear Gem Drop! May the new year bring you much happiness! Hugs with love, Linda |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You make me want to be a better witch.  (meaning--I tend to leave my doors wide open and neglect the cleansing rituals) Reading you was, actually a relief. so thank you |
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