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Open Poetry #36

Final Dance

bgj
Member

since 2005-11-09

Posts 128
Ga. USA

0 posted 2005-12-20 11:37 AM

                 Final Dance

      Down the stairwell the spirits drift
      Forever down they must.
      Down into the dungeon below
      To the darkness, the dampness and musk.
      Listen to their moans and laments
      Their sorrow is their due.
      As they pass you should feel the cold
      For their cries are meant for you.

      See the blessed rise from their rest
      And ascend into the sky.
      Hear the forsaken, their fear and shame
      As they ask the master why.
      Joy for the risen, misery for the damned
      For each of us reap our reward.
      And which of the final paths we take
      Depends on who we call lord.

              Bobby G. Jarrard

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-12-20 11:46 AM

Very nicely done Bobby. I very much enjoyed this.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-12-26 08:49 AM

Yes, Robert...

very good. Thank you!

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Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

3 posted 2005-12-26 06:20 PM

"As they pass you should feel the cold
For their cries are meant for you."

Very well done.

I love the way you ended this one.

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Jeep Monkey
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since 2005-12-18

Posts 96
Chaos

4 posted 2005-12-26 06:24 PM

I don't want to go down. Down = not good. Choices to be made, for sure.

bgj
Member

since 2005-11-09

Posts 128
Ga. USA

5 posted 2005-12-28 03:29 PM

Thanks guys for your comments. Happy New Year!
bgj

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2005-12-30 09:15 AM

Enjoyed Robert!

HNY to you as well!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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