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Rainy Echo |
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DanniArtist Junior Member
since 2005-12-08
Posts 16 |
Rainy Echo Dry floor for wet tears Folded clothes for lost years I dug and found buried memories Super white dust comes with the breeze Open door for an unwelcome visitor Small mouse for a pathetic predator Who rules the world, probably a dictator Who chooses life, maybe god’s ambassador Stormy cry for a dying man Fancy graves for the ones who can Pay money, they shall live Say modesty, nothing to achieve Evasive love for a rainy echo Broken ships for an unjustified embargo Don’t go, leave us a shred Of hope, maybe the world is not so bad But it is. Oh yes it is. Twisted moral for common thieves Glowing banana-shaped moons for dark eves Who judges us, if we stay selfish and mean Who smudges us, if we were born shiny and clean Expensive plates for the ones who can afford Ugly fast food for the ones who die old Tell me who stole god in front of our eyes Can you show me his replacement who lays up in the secure skies ? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I share many of your thoughts - but this line struck me: Tell me who stole god in front of our eyes because earlier, honoring Lennon, I changed my quote, which seems appropriate to this write . . . nice job and I hope you like: "You're just left with yourself all the time, whatever you do anyway. You've got to get down to your own God in your own temple. It's all down to you, mate. ~ John Lennnon |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I'm with Littlewing in being awestruck by the statement: who stole God in front of our eyes? That's just tremendous, as is the rest of this work...great writing...'S' |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I concur with littlewing and Sunnyone....the power of that line brings everything together and wraps around the heart....Magnificent...*big hugs* |
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DanniArtist Junior Member
since 2005-12-08
Posts 16 |
I want to thank you all for your complimentary comments, and Littlewing, the quote you present at your profile is so good and I really did like the comparsion you made ! Thanks again ! Truly yours, Danni@rtist |
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