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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2005-12-08 12:55 PM

There are notes of lightning above your eyes
galleries of sound
that I have walked around
with aching feet
and heavy burdens
of books to study you
for cures

and cues

Counting
with taps on new wood
as I wait on a bench
placed in memory
of someone dead

Your soul I mourn

and wait
for the return
of your features

When in thunder you sing
flesh unravels
you don’t look so much like you
anymore

when you sing

you're a storm
on the ledge
of my window closed.

So I watch
catching my death
with matted hair
and bedclothes

damp feet
from where I marched outside
shoeless
to rain.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-12-08 01:00 PM

I read you with such envy these days...

sighing here

blown away might seem like a bad pun here, but that's exactly how I feel.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2005-12-08 01:04 PM

I have no idea why but I saw you watching a thunderstorm and someone you love being up there ---> the heavens, nature, the sky or quite possibly yourself or one you loved, something you had lost along the way and it seems to me that when it rains, you feel them.

*nodding with K*

Blew my mind too . . .

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2005-12-08 03:05 PM

incredible, and this is 'rushed'? perfect as is, like its author..when she's not a pain in the...

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2005-12-08 05:36 PM

Perfect play on words..

your talent is breathless.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2005-12-08 05:40 PM

gemjop

"you're a storm
on the ledge
of my window closed."

I could see this and feel it....the sign of a good poem...a very good poem!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2005-12-08 07:07 PM

Amazing write..
talented you.
Hugs~Nancy

~Let peace begin with me...

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2005-12-09 11:17 AM

Your poetry is beautiful. You are very talented indeed. Thank you for the luxury of reading your art.

- Owl

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

8 posted 2005-12-09 06:30 PM

*faints*

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2005-12-09 07:08 PM

you do tend to collapse me with your writes yanno? Truly wonderful gift you have and share.
And yes, I agree with Littlewing, that's what I envisioned as I was reading this.
Nice, the new pic also.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 2005-12-09 10:23 PM

SweetGemma~
*sigh* at the knowing of the storm~
*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - [email protected]

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

11 posted 2005-12-11 02:31 AM

Sighsss....i thought i had replied to this magnificent penning.

arrggh just shoot me.....ok, ok I was kidding.....chillax

library

mxx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

12 posted 2005-12-11 11:16 PM

your spirt speaks well

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

13 posted 2006-01-06 06:29 PM

Incredible work.

"you're a storm
on the ledge
of my window closed."

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

14 posted 2006-01-06 11:24 PM

words and thoughts so tightly woven, yet coming out so naturally! Brilliantly written!

miscellanea

loved_and_redeemed
Junior Member

since 2006-01-03

Posts 22
BC, Canada

15 posted 2006-01-06 11:32 PM

Beautiful and breath taking.
You have a talent, and we are all lucky to get to read your fantastic work.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

16 posted 2006-01-07 01:17 PM

POETRY that deserves our full attention!

Love,
Margherita

CMGrimm
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

17 posted 2006-01-07 01:19 PM

OMG...i think i've found my new most favorite poet in here...

Great read...

thank you

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

18 posted 2006-01-07 03:21 PM

I know I already replied, but I wanted to add that this:

"when you sing

you're a storm
on the ledge
of my window closed."

Pretty much describes how I felt reading this.

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

19 posted 2006-01-07 07:14 PM

This is just too good to let slip from this page. I love it gemjop. I was enchanted by your narration. Bravo.

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