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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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you are thunderous arrogant, like the gladiator O clashing soldier, how you wave your sword in blue, in green: rushing always rushing you slay the breeze and roll the trees to take with you the solitary tears of the blue fish and your wet armour: you rise and you fall and fall falling white like the thick water of weeping like the slap of kisses to become the hillsong in my stream take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow just wow I feel like I was just caught up in a wave and I am now left crumbled on the shore like strung out sea weed! Wow...  |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I think I saw a lightning storm pass through these blue pages....Passion flared and thunder roared....Studding...*big hugs* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Oh Maree, I could see the waves as they crest in this, how they roll in and back out to the sea. God, I love the way you write Bella.. sigh....   Give me your heart |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I don't think there has ever been a time when I've read your poetry that I was not in awe and in admiration of your talent! This is no exception! The imagery is fabulous. Your word choice and the way space your pauses is just wonderful! To the top! miscellanea |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
The only things missing here are a trident, and the rete. Posiedon lives in this, Darksis |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree...You have a lucious talent for describing water. I loved this...seemed like a river or a waterfall.  |
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she'll_be_apples Junior Member
since 2005-07-11
Posts 22 |
very much enjoyed  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh! Me like dis! You took me right along on this ride -- well done, Maree! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Bella?  I forgot to click.... library...... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Maree, God, I saw so much here - but first I saw a whale . . it's mighty tail just above the water, and also lightning flashing through the sky . . . the soldier . . . and rightly so - it should be "untitled". |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and fall falling white like the thick water of weeping like the slap of kisses" wonderful job describing a wonderous and beautiful thing! I need to take a "beach day" from work.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and I wonder of your hillsong how do you worship enjoyed this ms |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
I have been on that same shore watching that same gladiator, enjoyed! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
falling white like the thick water of weeping like the slap of kisses to become the hillsong in my stream ~*~ What you won't take to make yours from the storm of storms...  |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Beautiful. The imagery is absolutely delicious. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Powerful. It is nice to get back and read my old favorites. Marilyn. |
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