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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2005-11-24 04:50 PM

Rain Mood
November 1999

I am the heartbeat of the falling rain,
recalling sharp-edged images
that sing yellow umbrellas
and breathe wet wool
and walk in puddles
and taste transient, primeval, earth-fresh air
and remember in a million shiny greens and soft, soft greys.

I am the essence of the rain,
abubble and awash with summer coolness
in a rain-grey sky.

I understand
that I do not understand
my struggle
to contain
an unexplored
and unborn
mystic exhilaration.

I am the rain.

- Owl

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2005-11-25 01:02 PM

Bravo!  Nicely done Owl.  But I think you
are more like a delicate snowflake,  softly
falling to earth.  Something tells me you don't
get snowflakes?

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2005-11-25 01:54 PM

i loved this write owls , this part is awesome -


and remember in a million shiny greens and soft, soft greys.

I am the essence of the rain,
abubble and awash with summer coolness
in a rain-grey sky.


i like your view of things owl
your style is calm and full of images
great !!!! ~jwolf

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2005-11-27 04:16 PM

Thanks Magnus, for enjoying my poem, for describing me as a "delicate snowflake", and yes, Magnus, something is right.  We don't get snowflakes, though once when I had just started teaching about 200 miles away from home and was going home for the weekend with 3 friends, we passed through a place called Mooi (it means "pretty" in Afrikaans) River and there was enough snow for us to have a snowfight - the 2 girls against the 2 boys.  We girls were wearing slops and once we got back into the car we noticed our feet were freeeeeeezing!  That was the only time that I have ever seen snow.  There are a few places in the country that have had a light snowfall over a period of about 1 day.  Also the mountain tops sometimes have snow on them.

Thanks aujussy wolf, for enjoying my poem.
I am glad you like my view of things and that you find my style calm and full of images.  My life is very stressed and hectic, so I have to balance it by breathing calm into my soul.

- Owl

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2005-11-28 03:25 PM

I'm looking -- right now I mean -- down from the sky to see your city....thanks to Google Earth, of course. Somehow I knew that doing so would help me to understand your poetry, and it does.....I wish we could always look from the sky at things of Earth.

Maybe I'll go write that.

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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2005-11-28 04:24 PM

absolutely stunning

I'm enjoying your work very much.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2005-11-28 04:44 PM

What an excellent write!
I so much enjoy reading you!
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words..
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2005-11-29 12:21 PM

Thanks, Ratleader. There, right up there, in the dark night sky, I see a Ratleader-Google-star. Hi, I'm waving, but you don't seem to see me. I'm glad you aren't afraid of heights! I agree, literally as well as metaphorically, it is always best to look down at things. That way you get the bigger picture.

Thank you Serenity Blaze and Enchantress for the encouragement. I am glad that you are enjoying what I write. I have had a terrible day and the welcome and encouragement from you and many people on this forum has made my day a lot less terrible!

- Owl

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

8 posted 2005-11-29 02:14 PM

I understand
that I do not understand
my struggle
to contain
an unexplored
and unborn
mystic exhilaration.

I am the rain.

there is a certain peace found within the understanding that is held within your words.
this is lovely. I too, am enjoying your writing very much.

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

9 posted 2005-11-29 03:25 PM

This is simply a

and I am placing it directly into my library. Beautiful !
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

10 posted 2005-11-30 11:40 AM

Thank you Gentle Spirit and Nightshade. It is a wonderful, warm, fuzzy feeling to be understood and appreciated, apart from the fact that it is great that my poem could bring you enjoyment.

- Owl

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