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Open Poetry #36

man close, elk distant

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

0 posted 2005-11-23 07:51 AM

the old elk was man close
he had grown a spirit
and knew of the creator
when his eyes were gray
there were pictures in them
of the rider above the clouds

young dogs ran by the water place
they saw the ghosts in shimmer
they barked at them talking
they asked how to become fish
so they could go up stream
to the pond of warm sounds

eagles were pieces of trees
that broke off and fell slow
the wind moved them faster
than the quiet air
they made the spirits laugh
when they pretended to be children

the old man is elk distant now
he has outgrown his spirit
and forgotten the creator
his eyes are gray now
and there are no pictures
of him riding above the clouds

I have seen these things
I have heard them from the earth
these things were not intended
even the stones tell of them
with their shadow writing
when they make worry pictures

that travel the long afternoons
______________

daark

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-11-23 07:53 AM

We oft times seem to thank you
for touching earth
and all of its tremors...

.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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2 posted 2005-11-23 09:01 AM

you touch a special place in my spirit with your words this morning D.

I love every style of your writing, but so you know, this is my favorite...

when your man spirit writes...

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

Martie

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3 posted 2005-11-23 11:42 AM

DS

I too love this spirit centered side of your writing.

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2005-11-23 06:24 PM

I llllllllove this! The saddest stanza is, of course, the second-last. The whole poem, especially the last stanza, has a Hiawatha flavour except that Longfellow, I am sure, would concede to your superior talent.

- Owl

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2005-11-24 08:35 AM

familypip you are wonderful feathers that give my penwings shape, thanks to each of you

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