Open Poetry #36 |
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On November’s Other Hand |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan ![]() |
And yet . . . Perhaps it would be good To lie in bed at night With books upon the floor And when dawn came All pink and blue To see in that first light A figure there Whose gentle breath Spoke of peace Now finally found Beneath the blankets We would share In a life we made our own |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
beneath the words it spoke to me. wonderful. |
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pictureme2 Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 194 |
On Novembers other hand beautiful write. Loved the ending line. pictureme2 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Beneath the blankets We would share In a life we made our own" The hope of many - good write! Loved the title! |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
books on the floor, and dawn...all pink and blue....yes...this sounds like heaven. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Yes Ed, it does . . . Like Tahiti without the flies . . . Thanks for reading. John |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
your poetry takes my breath away |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Helen, Please get it back . . . It's kind of nice you being around John |
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ChemicalRepose Member
since 2004-03-28
Posts 102 |
That was beautiful. |
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