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Doo, Doo, Doo, Shootin' Out My Back Door
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Doo, Doo, Doo, Shootin' Out My Back Door |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Doo, Doo, Doo, Shootin' Out My Back Door Peace is cheap. I buy it by the quart at Big Lots, Or rent some in the corner Of the video store. It’s war that costs, and I don’t buy. I shot a spider last month, In memory of a girl who had to eat one, And for my father of course, But that’s all, not a fetish: some war. Corks are good but they break. Still it’s fun to watch one Grasshopper across the yard, Check the little calibers of it spitting Off in random directions As it tries to dance out of range. The trick is not to shatter it, not all at once, only tease and tease. Today a hummingbird stopped, Dangling exactly there As if it needed to understand. I held as it hummed the sharps and flats Of its rhythmless seeking, Held while it flared down to plunder The red foxglove, and was gone; All the while it looked like a green cork Caught suspended in mid-jump. Tomorrow and tomorrow I’ll do the same; More sound, less fury, isn’t that the way? Bother me then if you must; Today I’m not at home. Peace is cheap. |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
I found this to be a very interesting write. I'm not quiet sure what it all means but I did enjoy reading it. I always have liked poetry that makes me think. Great write, lots of luck, bgj |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed I wish peace for you, but not sure how cheap it is. Your poem had a kind of zanny I don't care attitude..perhaps there is some peace in that.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
the thoughts I brought with me when I came to read tonight were suspended by this... (just like the little hummer) I do understand, in my own way, that Peace resides in accepting each tiny moment of Life |
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dreamdc Member
since 2005-11-11
Posts 54Utah, USA |
Loved the line about buying peace at big lots. Peace is cheap..its everything else that costs us so much. Great write I would like to know what aisle peace is on though  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ed... I sense the bouncing off of idiotic walls with this piece of peace... It could be very cheap, yes... yet...I think you're equating to the fact that war has cheapened the price of peace... and even a penny couldn't buy your thoughts now... and thank you.... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ed, this is like skipping stones. You never know where they will end and you can't see the damage done beneath the surface. Very comprehensive write, very profound musing.But please don't be this down. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey rhythm ratman  I forgot to tell you in my first reply how much I enjoyed your word-tweak on Fogerty/Credence, 'Lookin out my back door' tune (early 70's?). Remember this line? "bother me tomorrow, today I'll find no sorrows"  hugs, happy Saturday |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep, and Shakespeare's probably rollin' in his grave over my blending of that and his "tomorrow and tomorrow....." This poem was fun to write! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I saw this the other day Ed, and wanted to reply but got busy. I knew I had to get back to this. Yanno whats funny? I was just singing that song in my head the same morning that I saw your title. I enjoyed your write.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this on so many levels... one being the ping-pong effect you achieve... for isn't any real peace just that hard to predict, teasing us before skipping across the lawn/world? If I had to create a label for this work, it would be delectably disquieting... and darned superb! *S* |
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