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Open Poetry #36

an untyped comment from home

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2005-11-08 12:45 PM

You stay in melbourne now,
coping better with its cold
than your frostbitten spirits

Your blogged words
spoke of your
attachment to life
like an outdated CD
You endure
the same old boring tunes,
reluctant to
expand your repertoire

You turn to
larger-than-life movie characters,
with their mind-numbing showcase
of how to lead
psyched-up lives

You tolerate
the smirking blank screen,
whose shroud of charged emptiness
you fumble with
by hastily placing
yet another disc

I relate
I place faith too
in the odds of deriving
divine inspiration/knowledge/lessons/whatever
from classier fictional realities

Yet I left your blog
without leaving a well of words
because i couldn't quite pen
a comment about kindred spirits

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-11-08 01:07 PM

whoa and then some, excellent writing Missy!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2005-11-08 03:34 PM

Hey there, guy, have missed your insights in here.
Thanks, kaile, for gifting us with another incredible write.

Talk about a vivid portrait!:

"You tolerate
the smirking blank screen,
whose shroud of charged emptiness
you fumble with
by hastily placing
yet another disc"

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2005-11-10 12:45 PM

Kaile, I could just envision this scene as I have bloggers in the family....24-hr. bloggers. Thanks for sharing.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2005-11-10 01:14 PM

Wonderful!! I found this a complicated confession of less than perfect oneness.

Does that make sense to anyone but me?

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2008-06-21 06:23 PM

I hope I never make you angry! Your venom is deadlier, I believe, than any poison, but for good reason I am sure. This reminds me of a hate poem I wrote to an ex-boyfriend a few years ago.

Brilliantly done! And yes, getting it down on paper, is a wonderful catharsis, isn't it?

- Owl

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