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Was it Time
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Was it Time |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
I know Sunshine hates it when I won’t use proper structure, commas and the associated battlefield of planning how the reader should interpret what is writen, but sometimes it needs to flow and not be broken up by artificial mechanisms. How many people speaking in a stilted fashion, do so in public, apart from Politicians and those too afraid to get caught to 'speak openly and not through lawyers'. Structure is usually a garbled mass of words dressed for a single night out and displaying often one thought, and that is not yours. Let the reader decide. Now the words Dave *********************************************** Was it Time Was it time when we danced on words our thoughts dancing in a mix of ‘who cares’ and ‘who tries’ Was it time waltzing as we danced those memories in red that seemed the perfect clash of fiery to tempered Was it time when you left and maybe from then I knew time was telling me something Am I glad it is over – what was left but my strength and will, not to give up Was it time Perhaps To do so |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
I often procrastinate when it's decision time Hope |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Hope There are I believe many sides to action To wait To dally To think about it To know that jaw, jaw Is better than war, war Unless You finally know in your soul To act regards Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Was it time waltzing as we danced those memories in red that seemed the perfect clash of fiery to tempered Was it time when you left and maybe from then I knew time was telling me something Am I glad it is over – what was left but my strength and will, not to give up Was it time Perhaps To do so" Much enjoyed this piece Dave...well done! Hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
hi Dave Your words may not be of the usual poetic structure, but there is structure. When I read it I felt a definite rhythm and flow....and also you've structure in the repetition of the words, "was it time". Also, poet think is poetry, and your words are certainly thought out. Enjoyed! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I don't get to read here as much as I'd like to but am glad I caught this one because it has made me stop and ask "was it time" for many things in my life and in the outside world. Thanks for that. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thanks for sharing My spirit will rise |
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