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Of November Drought
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Of November Drought |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City 
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the bare syllables of your name bear the softest vowels of rain, like wayward cells, split in their cerulean elements, on my tongue so envelop the brain stems, in their crazed atoms, skim the hem of our darkened gardens, all clay, as my legs, once limber, forget their will to be ever unfolding, and I am, in this long trembling, so recklessly weaned from oblivion along the truant pathways of the body, you enter this longing, and spill along the arched trellis of the spine, like a river sinking deeply into the earth, and in the consummate gesture of faith, I bring the ruin of parched lips to the cradlesong depths of November’s fiery evening, and in the same breath, your mouth descends, a river’s devouring, pinks the onset of rapture in couplets, the bare syllables of your name bear the softest vowels of rain, against glass panes, keeping the drought in, our frail dream-catchers spin, oblivious in their neurons, as the rain stings, and sings its lament among the fire-eaten meadow, whose deepest roots harvest a red wilderness of ash.  2005 © Mari Laureano babygirLPress **Intoxicant to the SouL** [This message has been edited by babygirlwlove (11-02-2005 08:36 AM).] |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
made me want to cry this poem went deep babyg~ i am in awe .... but somehow, i still manage to give out a BiG HOWWWWLL..... so much love , ~wolfie |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent poetry...enjoyed....  -----------ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Whoa!!!!!!! yanno, that painting the Swing? Well, girl, this was the entire oppposite of that painting, and, by the way, well orchastrated through your words...marvelous depiction, tremendous visuals....every word touched my senses, drifting deep down into the soul...this was outstanding and one of my favorites of yours.... all I can say is...this, my dear poetess, should be published!!!!!! Guess you can sorta tell, I liked this a lot!  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bbg.. unfolded fingers with water slipping between and then there is your heart and I know how you hate flowers n-joyed you lil one |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wolfie~ if a panther could howwwwl...lol..it would...right back atcha' lol..thanks for the hit, love~ ~baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
ice~so many thanks for the kind review~ ~babygirL **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
LeeJ~ thank you, my friend for always looking out for me~I am so pleased you enjoyed this one so much~ ~babygirL **Intoxicant to the SouL** P.S. I don't know which Swing-painting you mean...you'll have to show me~ |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
DS~ lol...thank you for the eyes here, my friend~ ~babygirL **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
along the arched trellis of the spine, like a river sinking deeply into the earth, and in the consummate gesture of faith, I bring the ruin of parched lips to the cradlesong depths of November’s fiery evening, and in the same breath, your mouth descends, a river’s devouring, pinks the onset of rapture in couplets, the bare syllables of your name bear the softest vowels of rain, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ After just reading the Capts offering...this reads like a lovely raindance repose.. as always your grasp of imagery and vocabulary impress along the arched trellis of the spine how cool is that image and personifi I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~smiling at this gorgeous write, and wishing I could write like this~ oh, la poesie |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"you enter this longing, and spill along the arched trellis of the spine, like a river sinking deeply into the earth, and in the consummate gesture of faith, I bring the ruin of parched lips to the cradlesong depths of November’s fiery evening," you completely took my breath away with this! wow.... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
JM~ midnitesun~ & SEA~ thank you all for taking a look inward... much love, ~babygirL **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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