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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2005-10-26 10:02 AM

I walk this life naked
Baring my imperfections like a crown
Earned by stumbling, falling, bleeding
And I dare you to try to take it from me
For it is all that I have and I will not give it up

I walk naked through the streets
Of dying love ones, lashing my own skin
Trying to shift the pain
Trying to make sense of suffering
Nothing works the way it should
I walk with the stains of life tattooed to my body

I have ran naked from house to house
Looking for the home that should have been there from the start
Looking for the protection of parents that see beyond themselves
Pleading with tired eyes for some sort of recognition
That I am more important then the flesh they see

I ran naked with head held high
Screaming the injustice of just living
In a world full of greed, impatience and lust
Trying to break us, trying to make us
Into something reflected in their own mirror

I walk naked to show off the wounds and scars
Of not giving in to the consensus of this tormented planet
To show all that will look at my hideous scabs
That I can be brought to my knees but never for longer
Than it takes to weep for your blackened soul

I walk naked through life
To show you I have nothing to hide
And I still walk with pride because
I can cry for you, but never will I
Give in

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2005-10-26 10:06 AM

I ran naked with head held high
Screaming the injustice of just living
In a world full of greed, impatience and lust
Trying to break us, trying to make us
Into something reflected in their own mirror

all I can say is WOW!! wish I had written this~~

M

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2005-10-26 10:10 AM

I'm with Maureen.... Wow !!

hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2005-10-26 10:13 AM

I walk this life naked
Baring my imperfections like a crown
Earned by stumbling, falling, bleeding
And I dare you to try to take it from me
For it is all that I have and I will not give it up
this was exceptionally you, the forebidden most inner self, only yours, given by choice..and give a whole new meaning to..."you" choose your friends, they do not chose you. Marvelously enriching right/write.

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

4 posted 2005-10-26 10:24 AM

Some sort of recognition , more than the flesh they see , Susan I could relate , you could have been talking about me , but I agree , I refuse to hide , they can break my heart , but I will hang on to my pride

Hugs Hope

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-10-26 01:37 PM

"I walk with the stains of life tattooed to my body"
Susan, I love this line! For though I have no inked/artsy tattoos, I must be covered with this other kind!

thanks for this cool write.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2005-10-27 03:30 PM

strong stuff ma'am....

but then... you are a strong woman..

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2005-10-27 03:54 PM

WOW!! This is one amazing write Susan.
Love ya lady~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me.~

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

8 posted 2005-10-27 04:09 PM

naked, and no shame . . . powerful stuff!

Hugs,
Robert

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

9 posted 2005-10-27 04:56 PM

OK...so as long as you're naked anyway...

*grin*  Sorry, I had to do that.

The thoughts in this powerful poem touch deep threads.  Thanks for sharing it!

*smile*

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

10 posted 2005-10-27 11:01 PM

powerful and the validation of being true to self, hard to do these days it seems at times
when many want to box you in

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

11 posted 2005-10-27 11:04 PM

"I ran naked with head held high
Screaming the injustice of just living
In a world full of greed, impatience and lust
Trying to break us, trying to make us
Into something reflected in their own mirror

I walk naked to show off the wounds and scars
Of not giving in to the consensus of this tormented planet
To show all that will look at my hideous scabs
That I can be brought to my knees but never for longer
Than it takes to weep for your blackened soul

I walk naked through life
To show you I have nothing to hide
And I still walk with pride because
I can cry for you, but never will I
Give in"

I know just what you mean, Susan. I think I'm gonna get arrested for indecent exposure....hehehe. Seriously, I understand this and give you a standing ovation on your courage!

.....jo

JesusChristPose
Senior Member

since 2005-06-21

Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

12 posted 2005-10-28 06:44 AM

Beautifully written and very interesting to read too.
Pleading with tired eyes for some sort of recognition
That I am more important then the flesh they see

~ I especially enjoyed those lines.

How's the weather in Fla, Susan?

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

13 posted 2005-10-28 09:17 AM

*faint*

I brought Capt. Ron out?

miss you mister.

The weather here is doing the freaky cold/warm mambo...

Layering time..

Thank you so much everyone!

you guys are the sounding board of my deepest thoughts.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

14 posted 2005-10-28 09:50 AM

...and Susan, you are beautiful in your nakedness.

Warm hug and an understanding smile,
Linda

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

15 posted 2005-10-28 09:06 PM

Susan,
There is no more effective way to make yourself vulnerable than as you have described. You are indeed a BRAVE woman and admire you immensely. Here's to your courage and may life only get better.
Peace,
Larry C

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

16 posted 2005-10-28 09:41 PM

Susan,

This is superbly done, saying so much about
life, feelings...and hope...courage...and
more!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

17 posted 2005-11-23 12:35 PM

incredible purge here, i'm not sure what i adore more. the raw confession of this, or the image of you naked. mmmmmm nuditity

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

18 posted 2005-11-23 12:48 PM

im glad raffi brought this up again, its just magnificent

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

19 posted 2005-11-23 01:21 PM

lol Raph!

I do so adore you.

and thank you Inked one!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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