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Winter will again mis-read the sky
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Winter will again mis-read the sky |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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From my Journals of Endless Winter ~~~~ {I wish you could see these again} ~ Maybe he is lonely tonight his images speak of ordinary things captured in fields of light I might, for a moment, hear the tapping of his finger upon my soul its a delicate task remembering -- maybe in something I read or touch or how the moon sleeps with rain I am interested in the space between - how different blue looks falling from your eyes – that one night winter will misread the sky you know too the gray running along the scatter It's true this is about love the one thing you keep – yet, turn the key once & you cant keep any of it I try, but do not seem to find a place among this language I will leave all doors open to recall the simple equations of my memory wondering what sphere held us ~ it begins to rain I should have started with that ~~**~~ The sound of silence calls, I hear your voice and suddenly I'm falling, lost in a dream The echo of our souls meet ~~**~~ |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
"it begins to rain I should have started with that" ...................... That's a very good ending. This is something else Out of the ordinary. Again, very good. John |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
its a delicate task remembering -- maybe in something I read or touch or how the moon sleeps with rain I am interested in the space between - how different blue looks falling from your eyes – that one night winter will misread the sky you know too the gray running along the scatter It's true this is about love the one thing you keep – yet, turn the key once & you cant keep any of it ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I needed to read you tonite... for all the reasons you already know... I try, but do not seem to find a place among this language ~~~~~~~~ oh yes you do darlin poetess... yessssss you do |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
something about this one greeneyes it really draws in the reader ...lots of thought and beauty , one of your best : )~ wolfy |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sometimes we actually receive when we ask...I came to pip this morning hoping to see something from you... "it begins to rain I should have started with that" and it far exceeded my expectations.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
wondering what sphere held us I ponder the same sometimes, but then, in my way of thinking believe, that not all those we meet are we meant to be with intimately, but, confuse the purpose of that meeting, by becoming infactuated by our needs....rushing into things, before we really get to know, the knowing, and it is there, and from the pain of loss, that we perhaps come to flower? Your amazing write, is preciously a thread of life, beading the very existance of poetry. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Your pen is simply enchanting Lauren.. I am held captivated as I read. Love ya lady~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
how different blue looks falling from your eyes beautiful words~~ M |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Goodness, this is beautiful. Each line is worthy of pointing out and praising. I especially love the ending... although I wish I had more of it to read.  Love it!Always, Alyssa Hupomeno. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Two thumbs up Interesting write Tom |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
echoes of each drop words which linger praise, fear, want ... need. listen to the rain from the start ... it will fill whats missing in the heart. CT |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
mmmm..a beautiful piece ma'am... indeed... a pleasure to read you again |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
if you listen closely, you might hear the tapping of this poem upon some heart. you do have a way . . . no doubt. Robert |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I try, but do not seem to find a place among this language I will leave all doors open to recall the simple equations of my memory wondering what sphere held us ~ it begins to rain I should have started with that" ahha Lauren, I love reading you. this is fantastic...  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, I would so love to have a book of your poetry. When are you going to make that jounal into a book, Sweetie? Be sure to let me know!! I would never tire of reading you. Hugs, Ethel  |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
"I am interested in the space between - how different blue looks falling from your eyes –" This went straight to my heart... and mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You most assuredly have not lost your poetic touch!! Nice one.. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'd say yes, it's a very safe bet that he's lonely....and yes too, you were right to start with that (which of course you know).....I do like that way of enclosing things and bringing the reader's thoughts back to the start -- very original! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lauren, Too many beautiful lines to point out. As always your writing touches me deep within my soul. Hugs to you. Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
love to all thank you...  |
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