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Open Poetry #36

To Claim the Stars

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2005-07-12 04:08 PM

No more than takes to draw this breath
through stardust in the cosmic flow,
on nights when all the sky is poised,
an eminent domain, aglow.

As distant objects lean more close,
almost, as if to better hear
these words which cannot quite describe
just what this is, to make it clear.

A transformation has begun
that has to do with going back.
Out here among these dying suns
in contrast to the cold, dark, black.

There's something else I can't quite grasp
and yet, cannot ignore its' touch.
The spectrum stretches far too wide
and one can only see so much.

I've all that I can do to breathe,
for here within my true domain
the total awe such things inspire
words simply will not help explain.

Their influence extends just far
enough, one might reclaim the stars.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-07-12 05:14 PM

"As distant objects lean more close,
almost, as if to better hear"

and if stars had ears, I'd be aglow with their light from reading this aloud.

A nice visual in a lovely poem, Doc.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2005-07-12 05:15 PM

very beautiful thoughts... a soft aloud reading ( I hadn't read Karen's reply first..but we had the same idea

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-07-12 05:41 PM

Doc

"There's something else I can't quite grasp
and yet, cannot ignore its' touch.
The spectrum stretches far too wide
and one can only see so much."

Speaking of deep or wide, your poetry is that way too. I enjoyed reading this beauty!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2005-07-12 08:05 PM

Dr.Moose1, this is beautiful and I really do know what you mean. ......jo

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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5 posted 2005-07-15 04:10 AM

outstanding work!

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