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jellybeans
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0 posted 2005-10-17 10:32 AM

Angry at the approaching sun
the clouds grumbled a yawning
that yearned for the return of darkness;
shrouded themselves in shades of gray;
and in direct defiance of the light
skulked down to the blacktop
to prey on the careless and
the unsuspecting.

gotta say I normally love the fog, not sure why but I always have, but yesterday morning we came up to an accident just a few minutes after it happened where carelessness and the fog took a life ...sigh...and for some reason the fog seemed sinister and ill intentioned<\i>

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

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just out of reach

1 posted 2005-10-17 02:27 PM

Yes, even though it is soft and quiet....there is danger there...in the fog. Enjoyed this short piece very much. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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2 posted 2005-10-17 04:52 PM

There are times when I love the fog... welcome its wrap around me, even when it chills... but other times.... eek!

There's a road near my Dad's that can be one of the prettiest drives imaginable... but when the fog rolls in and I'm driving alone at night, my imagination goes into hyperdrive... and I scare the stuffing out of myself. LOL

You paint powerful images with your pen, my friend... this is excellent!

Sunshine

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3 posted 2005-10-17 06:45 PM

Past the tendrils of grayness
among the swirl and cush of cool
lies always
the unknown
ready to take us...

home.

miscellanea
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OH

4 posted 2005-10-17 08:45 PM

jellybeans,

You certainly paint a picture and mood with this. It is too bad that a life was lost. Glad you were able to write about what you witnessed. Writing tends to help me understand what I couldn't otherwise, yet, I can never quite understand Death. Hoping that your next outting with fog will be a much happier one.

miscellanea

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2005-10-17 10:40 PM

Many a life has been lost on a stretch of road near my home due to a thick fog rolling in and swallowing up everything in its path.

Your poem was a vivid reminder.

Linda

jellybeans
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6 posted 2005-10-21 02:31 PM

thank you all, this poem and this scene will stay long in my memory thank you for sharing your memories with me

Ratleader

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7 posted 2005-11-23 08:09 PM

Oh what a perfect paradigm for my mood right now....if I were describing how this day has gone for me, I think I'd have come up with at least some of the very same phrases you use so effectively here....

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Balladeer

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8 posted 2005-11-23 09:21 PM

What a unique way to describe fog!
Very sinister....I love it.

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