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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
autumn's flame bursts upon my eyes like stardust - crimson tides float by |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
autumn bursts like stardust upon my eyes - crimson tides good |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
bravo excellent rewrite! I wrote mine spontaneously in an ongoing chain but I love your rewrite...can I use it? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
flaming leaves of fall burst open the darkest souls brighten the mourning |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Beki Not a rewrite, merely another translation; the words came from some country in you; no need for permission for what is your own. John |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Beki I like the way this poem aligns itself with its subject, not only in words-but in a concrete vision of autumn imotion...Like fall it combusts spontaneously..The feelings, and sight of a world on fire is what you have captured... enjoyed ----------ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Beki, this was marvelous writing.... |
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