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Open Poetry #36

She Sees Not

DennisTheMenace
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since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

0 posted 2005-09-29 06:30 PM

The rough sands pull at her, trying to tickle toes,
But trips instead;
So she doesn’t walk barefoot on the beach.
Tree branches try to poke at her,
Trying to grab and gore, blocking her way,
So she doesn’t stroll the forest pathways.

On the smooth sidewalk she can travel,
Her white cane sweeping, finding the way;
So it’s there she wanders.

I put sand in her hand and a flower in her hair;
She’s a traveler beyond her steps.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2005-09-29 06:34 PM

This is such a touching write.
Much enjoyed.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2005-09-29 07:47 PM

I put sand in her hand and a flower in her hair;
She’s a traveler beyond her steps.

that alone is beautiful~~

M

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2005-09-29 09:05 PM

Oh my this is a lovely poem. This gives me a feeling of comfort as well. (yeah I know)

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Sharksbean
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since 2005-09-25

Posts 368
jax

4 posted 2005-09-29 11:22 PM

Hey Mr wilson great poem

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2005-09-29 11:58 PM

Great write, DennisTheMenance!

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

6 posted 2005-09-30 08:27 AM

Does she know you wrote this?
I'm going to read it to her
and you'll be in trouble again.

Gloom
(good write,
but can you try for a rhyme next time?)

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2006-01-29 05:17 PM

I thought this beautiful the first time~~~

even more now~~

M

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