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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2005-09-27 03:03 AM

The rain today a bonus pain,
grey sky like two gold stars
stuck at angles unaligned
with the clarity of heart.

No music but the tick of years
resounding loud inside
and it could be the thunder
if I moved the soul aside.

Weary now the eyes
of searching for the blue
like looking for a treasure
in an unfounded view.

And I rank with the pitiful,
this is known because I’m old,
but love is death defying
though blood like water cold.

Up and down the ladder
and no one seems to know
the stars in the night sky
the place where lovers go …
when it isn’t raining!

Helen / 27 September 2005

crimson tear
Member

since 2003-06-07

Posts 76
Massachusetts

1 posted 2005-09-27 03:22 AM

wow this was awesome it really pulled me in. good write.
shane

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2005-09-27 03:26 AM

Thank you, Shane. Your comment is very much appreciated.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2005-09-27 03:33 AM

"The rain today a bonus pain,
grey sky like two gold stars
stuck at angles unaligned
with the clarity of heart."

If pain could be described in an exquisite manner, then you have just done it, Helen.

....jo

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2005-09-27 04:46 AM

I guess I did, didn't I? Thanks, jo - muchly!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-09-27 08:01 AM

And I rank with the pitiful,
this is known because I’m old,
but love is death defying
though blood like water cold.

Love has gotta hurt a little sometime to flourish, with constant change and faithful hearts, love ripens with time...

Excellent writing Lady...
Morning

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2005-09-27 10:24 AM

Thanks, LeeJ. Your comments are valued.

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

7 posted 2005-09-27 07:13 PM

Always such poignancy in your words...poignancy and beauty.

Eric

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