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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-09-26 07:20 AM

four am fascination
perhapsing in her gown
on some special stare way
just for my eyes
and a virgin aloneity

she has her hands over her ears
pretending not to hear
what my eyes have to say
but she watches the mirrors
to catch every word

just in case there is an argument
for our reoccurring adultry
in this just one time mentality
and why did she bid I do
to that god that says loved less

is more lovely than unloved

________________

dark

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-09-26 08:27 AM

and why did she bid I do
to that god that says loved less

is more lovely than unloved

temendous insightfulness, asking the right questions...

Hey, DS Good morning

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2005-09-26 10:14 AM

Your words are fascinating, yet so sad the conclusion ... for her.

But then loneliness can be worse indeed!

Love,
Margherita

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-09-26 12:38 PM

DS

"and why did she bid I do
to that god that says loved less

is more lovely than unloved"

From the title, to the conclusion...wonderful word wise!!

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

4 posted 2005-09-26 03:09 PM

she has her hands over her ears
pretending not to hear
what my eyes have to say
but she watches the mirrors
to catch every word

...awesome...I'm speechless...

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

5 posted 2005-09-26 06:22 PM

Awesome indeed!

**wink**

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-09-26 08:38 PM

perhapsing in her gown
on some special stare way

~*~

A lovely play
on pleasure...

Angelheart
Senior Member

since 2005-09-08

Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA

7 posted 2005-09-26 08:46 PM

very nice write. thanks for sharing.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

8 posted 2005-09-26 10:04 PM

Oh my Giddeods!! I love your words...the mastery...the imagery! You take my very breath away...true poetry! What else can I say?? Thank you!!

Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine
Still shrouded in blinding Darkness

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2005-09-28 07:25 AM

nectarine nectarine,
Living reflection from a dream;
I was her love, she was my queen, And now a thousand years between

just feeling kind of unplugged this morning darkman, and you make me burst into song

as for this :and why did she bid I do
to that god that says loved less

is more lovely than unloved

i guess some of know that cakewalk all too way.....just right on target, as always, your word edges

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