Open Poetry #36 |
someone else is honest. |
Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
words you've said grow upon me like seasonal plants that you bring inside when it's cold... when you speak the truth i feel more or less like a weakness to myself and everyone else. there are times when i could explain how much i loved you, ways you have said particular things that somehow melted me... but moreso, you have stolen my intricate mind, my strict puzzle pieces and i hate your inferior smile you make me sick.. you can't undo what you have already made excuses for... there are times when i am too honest.. but i miss you merely because i need someone else. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"you can't undo what you have already made excuses for..." no you can't "i miss you merely because i need someone else." and hard to admit but true you are so under my skin you write of my heart and mind too...amazing ...just amazing |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I am drawn in by these inner reflections .... to make those pieces of the puzzle fit. to have someone to hold true .... sending both you and Helen little reminder hugs, for you are both SOMEONE special. CT A word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
you can't undo what you have already made excuses for... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Reminds me of a song.... "With excuses like baby that was a long, long time ago, but a short time's a long time when your mind just won't let go" Enjoyed your painfully honest thoughts here, Kaoru~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I know this feeling well with the grandkids Meg: ways you have said particular things that somehow melted me... and you sure got the feeling right It is so hard to fill a void with second best isn't it? Good and honest writing. Love the new pic too |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Very powerful piece Kaoru. You put me in your shoes and they are a mite uncomfortable. I love and appreciate the honesty you display. You delivered the last line like a left hook. I think moreso better get his act together. :-) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there are times when i could explain how much i loved you, ways you have said particular things that somehow melted me... like a summer shower of emotions, all soft and dreamy...this was a powerful and forthright... Enjoyed extremely |
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