Open Poetry #36 |
Shadows of Oak, Rivers of Tears |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sands swallow the grief of loss, of emptiness that swarms like a hive of bees before the winter’s chill dampens their edginess. It was yesterday, that time months ago when a passing wind carried you...leaving you lifeless, allowing a remembrance to swell and consume...why? Why must sands swallow that which wells within me and bring the dew laden cacti to the palm of one’s hand...resting gently, as gentle pressure prods the mind... I see the weed covered walk, the trees that bear forgotten fruit, the crops that once rose rigidly in wait the harvest. I see the mighty oak standing ominous over a once trodden drive, a rusted fence weaving vines over it’s feet....where you once stood proudly..... Surrounded by sons, grandsons and showered with all that each could give... And now....the grasses grow silently, shrouding the life that once was....as flowers rest above you....and tears flow gently to the cold earth....as my hand reaches out, touches that which shall never again be....as a son grieves softly to himself and hopes to one day be remembered as well... [This message has been edited by Magnus (09-12-2005 09:40 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Excellent write and one of your best. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
this is by far a TRUE HEARTfelt piece my friend. very deep and rooted for a time .... good to read you again! CT A word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You have been missed Barry, thank you so much for sharing this beauty. I believe one of your best, and thus marked |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
wow Barry....this leaves me speechless..... good to see you... ~~**~~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhMagnus~ My heart was squeezed by the poignancy of your soft-hearted remembers~ 'It was yesterday, that time months ago when a passing wind carried you...leaving you lifeless, allowing a remembrance to swell and consume...why?' Oh, my friend ... why indeed ? Great big ole *HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow. This could be the introduction to a great story! Into my library it goes! hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Barry... so good to read you again! Hugs~Nancy I wait now at the lake or walking by the bay |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry....A memory guarded by the shadow of the oak, the tree will keep safe, as will your heart. This was so poignantly beautiful! |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
thanks for sharing |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beautiful writing, BJ. I can tell it is straight from the heart. ....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a beautiful, loving write. *S* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Feeling this today~~~ M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Why must sands swallow that which wells within me and bring the dew laden cacti to the palm of one’s hand...resting gently, as gentle pressure prods the mind..." why indeed and this piece, my friend is pure poetry I FELT this one, deep within my pores |
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Obsidian Snow Member
since 2005-08-24
Posts 88 |
A tribute written with depth and meaning. She would be so proud. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Oh, to be remembered with such love. I would have felt thrice blessed had I but known. And I am sure your love was felt in life as in death. Great work Mangus. martyjo |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Barry...Tender heart touching write. Memories of those gone but never forgotten and always loved forever. Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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