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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-09-12 10:27 AM

In shadows of gray
lie these charred
and scattered thoughts,
collections of heart speaks
singed by another’s desire

leaving memories there
to hot to hold
but that flame smoldered out
long ago

and in my forgiveness
I've found myself picking
through good versus bad
yet,
you’re still the best
that I've ever had
in love;

Oh, what a love
it was indeed;

joy mixed with pain
through words,
I've learned  to bleed

and I need you now
as I did then,
back when    fires raged
lighting the night

when everything
       still was right.

I'm sifting through dreams
and memories
and all that remains here,

in these shades    of ash.

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (09-13-2005 10:56 AM).]

passing shadows
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displaced

1 posted 2005-09-12 10:36 AM

beautiful

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

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just out of reach

2 posted 2005-09-12 02:28 PM

This left me feeling sad and lonely.
Well written though dearheart.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2005-09-12 02:55 PM

Thank you PS.

Ah Chris, no worries. You are such a sweet lady!!

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2005-09-13 11:07 AM

I think love is sometimes like that, we all shift to find the happier moments, and sometimes wish the harder moments would fade like ash....

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands
~~**~~

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

5 posted 2005-09-13 11:19 AM

omg~

that's lovely Gentle.....
just lovely...

~baby

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

6 posted 2005-09-13 11:21 AM

Excellent write Donna...
I guess we all hope the good times were really 'good'..
if you know what I mean..
a reassurance that we had something good.
Heart-hugs.

I wait now at the lake or walking by the bay
I wait and listen or put a seashell
to my ear and it all comes back
the wind's soft murmur..and you.

Angelheart
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since 2005-09-08

Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA

7 posted 2005-09-13 01:56 PM

this made me feel depressed....but this was a good write...thanks for sharing

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Goldenrose
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Posts 3665

8 posted 2005-09-14 06:23 AM

A poem of personal inner searching..portrayed to us in a good and candid manner..well done..i enjoyed reading..well done..

Goldenrose.

Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2005-09-15 01:43 AM

Wow, a magnificent write m'gentle one.

m xx

~i want for myself your trembling~

iliana
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10 posted 2005-09-15 02:51 AM

"and in my forgiveness
I've found myself picking
through good versus bad
yet,
you’re still the best
that I've ever had
in love;"

Donna, I felt the longing in this lovely write.

....jo

crazy4u
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since 2001-10-28

Posts 67

11 posted 2005-09-15 02:54 AM

oh! this is so sad. ive been there. those memories ache. thank you for the poem.

Obsidian Snow
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since 2005-08-24

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12 posted 2005-09-15 12:22 PM

Very well written in such an honest display of still raw emotion.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

13 posted 2005-09-15 12:50 PM

"when everything
       still was right.

I'm sifting through dreams
and memories
and all that remains here,

in these shades    of ash"

Donna, truly, one of my favorites of yours...exceptional!  and in my library.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Martie

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14 posted 2005-09-15 02:16 PM

Donna

"I'm sifting through dreams
and memories"

I also do that alot, finding some wonderful, and some not!

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

15 posted 2005-09-15 02:44 PM

GentlestOne~

'singed by another’s desire'

'yet,
you’re still the best
that I've ever had
in love'

Oh, wow ... seems the embers hold such warm memories~

I've stirred these ashes ... and found such warmth in the burn of their remembering~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Cloud 9
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16 posted 2005-09-15 04:21 PM

Beautiful

Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2005-09-16 10:27 AM

Thank you, each.

Nancy, it's not really hoping it is good
its keeping what is known to be good
and just chuckin the rest out of the window
sort of. I know, you know.