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common sense |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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Life can run amok, And you all know that too well, Bills are never paid on time, Even when you work overtime, work is not bad, you convince yourself, then comes the boss with extra assignments, you are fluster at this very moment, but you sit there and not mediate, no need to persuade me, for this is your life, I have one of my own, See how I live it free, At times I get sad and angry too, But I give it some time Then i can breathe just right, no, it is not something I learn from school, just applied some commonsense that’s how I knew you fool. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
So full of truth this piece is. I loved it. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Fragments It needs a lot of time to get underneath it's depths I dont think you will have that time before it disappears Bodger |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
This is good but does not reach a point to it, it does need work a little on it, I am not cutting it down, the words sound good, but dont over-reach and you will do fine  thanks for sharing |
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