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Limbic System. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Copius cortex, let me think for a minute on a higher level above eyes on tiptoes percieving only half of my whole mess, a jagged misfortunate circle severed with scizzors meant for craft... I am nothing of art nor creativity in this skull-case of s w e l l with nowhere to go. Tell me lobe why do I stagger inundated with gravity, Are my synapses so little pruned in this stark garden that I never learn it means the same thing second, third and fourth since i last let it grow this figure of speech? When i knew it would flower for a little while Until I love you's were eyes that looked me up and down on their very stalks at all the excess you should know I love you so towards my right but my left dear one is not severed yet. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
The entire limbic system fascinates me. Emotion, fear, speech, smell . . . Fight or flight . . . memento . . . |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Until I love you's were eyes that looked me up and down on their very stalks at all the excess" methinks your brainwaves are working overtime and its time to let the heart take over good to read you again, lady! |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
ah! so many great lines...it reads so controlled and if you've ever read anything of mine you might understand why i'm rather envious of that. i've read this three satisfying times tonight. thanks. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
How's my little Gem Drop doing! Do drop in more often ~ pretty please!  I doubt that there has been a poem of yours that I have not read at least twice! They are so rich in text and truths! ~ "Are my synapses so little pruned in this stark garden" ... A question that I have asked of myself far too many a time! lol Loveya! Linda |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Sue, me too, its fascinating, how each part of the brain holds different 'powers' almost. Thanks for always reading. x Kacy, thankyou, but trust me, following my heart will do me no favours in this one! x Alicia, wow, three times, what a compliment. And yes, i have read you, recently 'the thin lines' something like that..and see no reason for you to be envious of anything i write, when you write like that! x Linda, awwww i love hearing from you, you always make me feel happy. thankyou too, for always reading me. And oh yes, I'm with you there on the pruning, what is the matter with our brains?! x Damned ladies of Orpheus |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love you so towards my right but my left dear one is not severed yet. I've always been fascinated by the way our brains work. And I loved the way you weaved these facts into your poem. Really awesome writing, Little One. And, I love your picture up there. The color of your hair looks good on you. See you later, sweetie. Hugs,  |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
I had some training on this myself. "Are my synapses so little pruned in this stark garden that I never learn it means the same thing second, third and fourth since i last let it grow this figure of speech?" Very cool! I much enjoyed reading this... the meaning is still sinking into, now which part of the brain is that again?  "If this grand panaorama before me is what you call God... then God is not dead." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"of my whole mess" I just love that line. The juxtapostion of "whole" and "mess" coupled with the marriage of the two in description is my appetizer to a feast of thought. I love when that happens. *thank you* I should tell you more often, but I count you as one of the more inspirational poets here. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Wow, you're writing a controlled poem about how the BRAIN works, and I struggle to comprehend my life from day to day. I believe my brain works just fine, but as far as how, umm, *shrug*. Oh yeah your picture is cool looking too. -GIS Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Are my synapses so little pruned in this stark garden that I never learn it means the same thing second, third and fourth since i last let it grow this figure of speech? whoa!! and then....but my left is not severed yet... very strong and powerfully felt..this is one of my favorites.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Until I love you's were eyes that looked me up and down on their very stalks at all the excess you should know I love you so towards my right but my left dear one is not severed yet"  you rock. and I am speechless."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a limbic alembic gem great poem |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
had to go hunting for this one, #$&%$*@ fantastic. some of your best writing this |
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