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leaving only time in day-dreams |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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the wintered throbbing is almost over and my voice drowns in the rain and the wind carries it to far away places what hope completes bites the centre of my intentions and closes the doors approaching leaving only time in day-dreams behind these high windows my eyes are sightless and the names of months between us is all i hear, and the word...summer it punches the air and you, my fluttering monarch determine the silence in the walls ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent.....  "what hope completes bites the centre of my intentions.." "it punches the air and you, my fluttering monarch determine the silence in the walls" indeed...enjoyed ------------ice ><> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautifully awesome |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and the names of months between us is all i hear, and the word...summer it punches the air and you, my fluttering monarch determine the silence in the walls... ~*~ You do a fine bit of punching, too! Just wish you'd do it a bit more often!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Sharing in this silent emotion through the beauty of your words. Exquisite! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Dahm this is nice..... I love the way you move it internally, the verbs, the color words, the tones.....excellent work! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree How lovely this is!!!  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
it punches the air and you, my fluttering monarch determine the silence in the walls'''' sigh....outstanding Maree....there is a deep feeling to this...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Maree, this is bar none my favorite of all time of yours. I am no poet but the wording you chose to get the picture across was simply outstanding. (See I don't care if I look dumb, as long as you know I loved this!) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you everyone, I appreciate each one of you so very much Smile....and Ms Sharon, don't let me hear you say again, that you're no poet..ya hear me lady! Mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sychronicity, words move the sky you and your butterfly wings |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
sometimes silence can be so vast, one eventually forgets how to speak...and oh how we all beg for summer (the rains have been falling for far too long) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord and summer is almost over here . . . but the subtext caught my mood, as of late, quite well. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
If my words could move the sky, I'd be where i'd want to be with a flick of my pen..if only, Thank you Ms Ink Dawn Marie? "sometimes silence can be so vast, one eventually forgets how to speak" Let's hope not eh? Thanks for popping in. e me Suzie, oh i just can't wait for that hot seering sun lol now that it is cold heh. Thanks lil one ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I give you your summer as I wait to embrace the cool, soothing winter. Alright so winter isn't that bad here... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
what hope completes bites the centre of my intentions and closes the doors approaching leaving only time in day-dreams Dream on Bella, my lil dreamer. and may they all come true dear poetess. yesterday is gone |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
Heh. And to think I've been not-so-patiently waiting for winter.  (Though I hear you folks have had a rough one this year ... *warm hugs and a bit of CA sunshine to you*) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
what hope completes bites the centre of my intentions and closes the doors approaching leaving only time in day-dreams I closed that door a long time ago, even still, you pack the prettiest punch, Ms. Maree~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
mine (daydreams) are all highways and a full tank of gas.. (shh..someone will mug me to steal it) enjoyed this ms |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Your winter is racing across the world Even as our summer fast travels toward you As Susie says, The bits underneath are pretty good too! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now tell me lovie, who is "poetica"?  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I have read this so many times now, and think its time i replied! though everyone has long quoted the outstanding beautiful ending lines. They are so strong, despite their lightweight-free feel. Library, finally. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Always the poetess..... simply amazing. Billy 8) "If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
hugs |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Summer Yessss , but the winter is just starting for poor lil wolfy ....help dark angel ...where is the sunshine baby lol happy thanksgiving Howlls ~wolfy |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
just cuz...I miss your words and your presence so damn much.... sigh Bella, even when its a re-read for me, every word moves me.. c'mere... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"what hope completes bites the centre of my intentions and closes the doors approaching leaving only time in day-dreams" Awesome write, Maree! ....jo |
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