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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2005-08-18 09:28 PM


Quickly close yon flower
When rain come with it rebirthing power
Moistening the ground
With a rhythmically melodious sound.

Sway on the breeze soft
Bend with the wind that blows leaves off,
Quiver with the thunder
As you drink deep down under,

Return after tonight’s shadow
Be there when comes the morrow
When I will come and pluck;

ahh,
well you make up the last line yourself


Gloom



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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2005-08-18 09:39 PM


~a blossom called good luck~

LOL

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2005-08-18 09:42 PM


Thank you, Midnitesun
Well done,
none of my thoughts were flowing that way,
Pleased to have your words mingle
With mine

Gloom

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3 posted 2005-08-18 10:00 PM


anytime
Martie
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4 posted 2005-08-18 10:29 PM


and by your thorn be stuck?
yv
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5 posted 2005-08-18 10:35 PM


~And kiss thine petals with a lover's suck~

Sorry...that's the best I could do...not really all that good at the ryhming thing.

Lovely poem...however...not to be marred by my ridiculous line!

Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine
Still shrouded in blinding Darkness

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2005-08-19 12:56 PM


Enjoyed...James
iliana
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7 posted 2005-08-19 02:44 AM



Return after tonight’s shadow
Be there when comes the morrow
When I will come and pluck
In my lapel, I'll tuck.

For all to see the splendor
Nature's colors render
And on that sweet morrow greet
All passerbys I meet.

Much enjoyed, Professor-not-so-gloomy.   ......jo

Midnitesun
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Gaia
8 posted 2005-08-20 10:32 PM


~all the thoughts that ran amuck~
Sunshine
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9 posted 2005-08-21 09:59 AM


Return after tonight’s shadow
Be there when comes the morrow
When I will come and pluck;

And finally rid me of this sorrow.


nakdthoughts
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10 posted 2005-08-21 10:23 AM


Quickly close yon flower
When rain come with it rebirthing power
Moistening the ground
With a rhythmically melodious sound.

Sway on the breeze soft
Bend with the wind that blows leaves off,
Quiver with the thunder
As you drink deep down under,

Return after tonight’s shadow
Be there when comes the morrow
When I will come and pluck;
Of iridescence struck

Ceinwyn
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11 posted 2005-08-21 04:45 PM


I'm just going to flirt with the lingering thought you have provoked.... this aches..and makes my heart ache as well...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

green_itchy_stuff
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12 posted 2005-08-21 11:36 PM


"Tis the beauty that grows in muck"
Sorta comical.  
Or what about, "Curse this hole in which my head is stuck!"  

If it were me, I might prefer the latter, "ladder."

Um, but yeah, nice write.

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

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