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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-03-16 07:22 AM

she is a tiptoe river
brushing her hair
on the sky edges
when she runs bare foot
through the coastals

she pretends to be a doe
sometimes
leaving her scent
salty seep of sea
on an oak branch

looking behind her
at the poetry of evening
as if it were a lover
with willing arms
and she only had to return

to wear his love
in her belly valley
and bear him songs
that were the voice
of a thousand children

behind a heaven window
it is then she dances
with smile sided eyes
the lady night
in her indigo gown

with dawn hemmed promise
_______________

dark

sweetpoetess
Member

since 2005-02-27

Posts 428
Florida

1 posted 2005-03-16 07:42 AM

Awesomely written.

Poetry is beauty in words.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2005-03-16 07:44 AM

she is a tiptoe river
brushing her hair
on the sky edges
when she runs bare foot
through the coastals
----------------------------
looking behind her
at the poetry of evening
as if it were a lover
with willing arms
and she only had to return

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behind a heaven window
it is then she dances
with smile sided eyes
the lady night
in her indigo gown

with dawn hemmed promise
-----------------------------------

you do this so consistantly well that one has to wonder if its as effortless as you make it look. Another gem from that groovy muse of yours.

one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ...
~ take only memories ... leave only footprints ~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2005-03-16 08:52 AM

Ditto JM.

This is smooth. Very well done sir!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2005-03-16 09:01 AM

damn dark..

you do collapse me with your talent...

I'm keeping this one....

oh yes....I am....

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2005-03-16 10:56 AM

Mmmmmmm - D - you paint her so pretty - I can feel her -

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2005-03-16 01:57 PM

Just beautiful, DS!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2005-03-16 02:57 PM

Oh man, melt me why don't ya.

just beautiful.

mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2005-03-17 07:14 AM

you mind's eye, sees truth in beauty

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2005-03-17 10:08 AM

she pretends to be a doe
sometimes
...
looking behind her
at the poetry of evening
as if it were a lover
with willing arms
and she only had to return

~*~

Lucky doe...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2005-03-17 10:19 AM

"behind a heaven window
it is then she dances
with smile sided eyes
the lady night
in her indigo gown"

~ Oh my! It's lucky, lucky me! I have an indigo gown and I love to dance "behind a heaven window"!

Gosh, yer good, Tall, Dark, and Handsome!