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In The House That My Father Built
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In The House That My Father Built |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
In The House That My Father Built There was a tinkling piano softening the air downstairs, in the house that my father built I ask the musty air just where did the time go, when did the porch swing get repaired? The dusty silence fills me with guilt My childhood is a Crayola box rainbow I did my best to never color outside the lines in the house that my father built I ask my mother just where did daddy go, when did he leave and why? Her heavy silence fills the air with guilt Ice cream, library books and movies with my Sunday father in the time that he spent with me and my brother every week with dad and brother in the front of the car me in the backseat to my fantasies I'd tend In the house my father built in the backyard with my toys I create these worlds alone I ask the wind will he play with me again? guess I was just a naive little boy and the wind's silence chilled me to the bone Now that I see him, now that I'm grown and the house that my father built is dying, fading away I still feel strangely alone I ask my father for my boyhood back I know he can't give it back I guess I want him to feel a little guilt the same feeling I carry inside for all that I left behind in the house that my father built for the boy I left behind in the house that my father built |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well done, my friend....brings back a lot of memories .... and feelings... you've done yourself proud. jwesley |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
soul drifter I understand this with my similar feelings...such a good poem! Thank you for sharing it. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"My childhood is a Crayola box rainbow..." I always felt my craola box was missing a basic hue.... many colorful thoughts from this write, soul drifter |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very well done |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this sure brought me back in time wow |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
soul drifter, After reading one of your other poems this morning, I thought I'd dip into another. I'm not a poet nor do I know much about poetry, but I think you are quite a talented writer. You evoke this reader's feelings! Your poem, very melacholic. I sense there were happy things remembered, as well as those in which one had no control over... Again, I enjoyed. miscellanea |
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