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James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2005-03-14 06:03 PM

bee

you spill your drink
so
casually
on the concrete
table

spill me small talk
watching
the pink pool run
slow
sparkling
to the very edge

bulging
against gravity
it holds
glistening
wanting to fall
unable

minutes pass
hesitant
and it retreats
flattens as
the cement starts
to take it

just then
the first bee
finds it
and I understand

you only wanted
to watch them
come
suck
what they think
is nectar
for your amusement

I move
around the table
slowly
not to
disturb

it shimmers
pink,
delectable
as I land
beside it

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2005-03-14 06:27 PM

Whoa! Now this excellent piece of writing must go back to the top for others to appreciate.
hugs, Chris

"Nunc scio quit sit amor."
~ Virgil

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2005-03-14 08:52 PM

Jamie

It is so easy to see this scene....You have a way of writing that is so real.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2005-03-14 08:53 PM

You're a bee ~ or not a bee! That is the question! lol

Enjoyed this vignet!

EA

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2005-03-14 09:02 PM

James,
   You do it everytime!  Cause me to lose myself in thought!  Oh, the trails this takes me!  Love the entire poem, but as a wishabee fiddler in science, I really was captured by your description here:

spill me small talk
watching
the pink pool run
slow
sparkling
to the very edge

bulging
against gravity
it holds
glistening
wanting to fall
unable

Sounds like a little "surface tension" is going on!   You write brilliantly with a reservoir of knowledge in so many diverse areas.  I'm sooo envious of you, James!
Grin.

                  miscellanea

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-15-2005 10:52 AM).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2005-03-15 05:04 PM

And some "below the surface" tension, as well! *S* I like this very much, my friend... especially the ending... temptation is so hard to resist... especially when it shimmers so pink you simply MUST taste. *S*

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