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October Turned
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October Turned |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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October Turned Beneath the leaves of grass between the spread of your fingers, beyond the roots, buried beneath your cheeks enclosed in pants, I see you . . . I hear you, I know who you are. Vultures cloaked in black – heralds smelling the scent of your lies, you always did have ready tears – don’t drop them here, they burn with deceit even through the dirt. October Turned. Geese flew south, Leaves fell and died and I joined them in the ground, hidden by your lies, but I see you. . . I hear you, I know who the Ravens call. Vultures, smelling death, soar in the sky above the trees beneath which you sit, shedding false tears . . . October Turned. The pangs of winter fill your soul. Too late for remorse, and tears, first time real, drop meaninglessly on fallen leaves. But I see you. . . I hear you, I know who you are – We know who the Ravens call. "October Turned" - A title I've had laying around for the longest time so finally just threw something on it, but not the warm, sensitive thing I always envisioned. w. james beard, jr. © march 2005 |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This time it sounds like October turned on someone. When the reader can feel the emotions, whether harsh or kind...the poet has hit the mark. Bulls eye. TD |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this aches, fantastic title,...feel the anger/dissapointment in this...enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is a different sort of a write for you Jimmy...at least to me it is. I like it. It's dark, but I like it.  hugs, Chris "Nunc scio quit sit amor." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hi Jimmy and Good Morning, this was indeed a treat, to read your lovely heart...I'm sorry this must be an experience for anyone to suffer...hugs to you sweetie, and thanks so much for taking the time to read my poem and comment with such study, concern and kindness...I will keep trying, and yes, now that you've pointed it out to me, it is like a rant... Hugs to you  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Jimmy! Good to read this side of you... You took that title and ran with it...good one! hugs~Nancy ~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~ |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Not warm and sensitive, like you say, but powerful, poignant and deeply lived....I very much enjoyed ~P |
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