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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I crested the wave of sorrow believing the past was dead with no power to hurt washed away by the tide of time then the sea of indifference swamped me Dumped, time and again I descended into the depths too tired to struggle too weary to rise to the surface I saw wonders beneath my perception of the world shaded by water’s haze I lingered longingly until death called me, in siren song Yet the need for new air forced my body to rise to the surface I breathed in and out, lost in the depth of the moment floating, but not seeing listening yet not hearing less than half alive my body functioning my mind adrift in the vastness of solitude Encouragement lobbed me to the shore I found myself washed up on a beach my mouth full of sand shivering with cold feeling the pain of life in every pore yet very much aware and alive now there's nothing more to do, than go on like the ocean – I am foam riding the crest to infinity. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Kethry, this is a profound write and I relate to this experience and have also expressed it in words. It's the call of love that brings us back into life, making us appreciate it more than ever. Wonderful piece. Love, Margherita |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
like the ocean – I am foam that.... is both beautiful and sad. isn't it wonderful when we can see both visions at the same time? i think so. it's a fantastic line and one that will stay with me for a long time to come. i enjoyed this read. snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am foam riding the crest to infinity. You are much much more than that, Keth~~ How are you and your family?? I have missed you!  M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
my mind adrift in the vastness of solitude Encouragement lobbed me to the shore ~*~ The juxtaposition of these lines, Keth, raise not only foam, but hope. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I think we surf the same ocean - well written Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I found this very moving for it brought to my mind a time when I once felt the same way. You have expressed these feelings so poetically. Love is what brought me ride the crests of the ocean's wave. Love for, and from another ~ and love for myself. You are more than the foam on the high seas! You are an integral part of it! A fine piece of poetry, Keth! Linda |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow, Kethry ... what a powerful and strikingly visual piece. I loved the ending lines, really well done.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write!  *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhKeth~ You painted a word-scene so vividly ... I felt that I could see the entire movement of the cresting wave laying the foam upon the shore~ BRAVA ! How are you dear lady ? *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the wintering into foam the resurrection into a galloping wave the tides ever changing hang on for the life ride |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
such touching and vivid imagery brought my heart to swell and sink with the tide of your writing......awesome Eno Words are my medicine. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved one, Oh dear Lord, how exquisite is this, I wish so much I had even half your ability darling one, but its no use I never will. You know I’m going to say this is utterly perfect don’t you? Well, of course I am because it is. The structure, the flow, that ending all combine to reveal the genius that is you, your writing is truly outstandingly good. That you can write so that I can see the scene and almost hear the waves is just an example of how brilliant and emotive this perfect piece of beauty from you is. Truly exquisite beloved one, I love this, I love it utterly  Love you always And forever more Mushy  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... I know anything I write is going to sound dull... for I'm following Mushy. *G* Maybe I'll just applaud VERY loudly? *S* This is fantastic, my friend... the final image is incredible... Beautiful write!! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....and I....hmmmm, I'm starting to see a pattern here..... ...oh, that's right! We hafta take turns; it's a dimensional thing.... |
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