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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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sparrow as she flits branch to ground to yard wall one round eye tracks the empty feeder now the roof out of sight but she watches sparrow’s rush so patient |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very cool presentation of your lovely poem  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The formatting adds such impact... we don't just read the motion... we feel the brush of wings. *S* I love this, my friend... especially that attention to the empty feeder. LOL A pair of doves call my balcony home every year... they haven't showed up to start building their nest yet... but I'm sure they'll give my window a peck or two to remind me of my duties once they settle in! *S* Beautiful work!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That's what I forgot to do today... fill the feeder... Check. Now it's on my to-do list! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Your formatting Is like watching the bird search. Enjoyed |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
packed with a punch...a soft and loving one...playful and kind.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah your words flitted about like a sparrow! Wonderful words and presentation. Hugs~ ~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~ |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very interesting, and enjoying. I felt I was flying with the sparrow Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful presentation for most wonderful words! Eric |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed I like the thought of rushing to be patient...somehow the way you say it makes the two compatible. Great presentation also, with the flitting from place to place apparent. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, she has to move-move-move because that's her nature....but while she's constantly changing position so a predator can't home-in on her, she's patiently waiting for me to show up with the bird seed....her and the other 50 sparrows, the seven doves and the six or eight finches.....at least the doves manage to ~look~ patient while they're waiting! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a splendid flight very wispy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I read this earlier I enjoyed it |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My pals aren't satisfied with longing looks... they knock their lil birdie demands until I get on with the feeder filling! LOL Just TRY to sleep with a couple of 'em pecking on the window... Bugs and worms are safe around my balcony... for the doves are spoiled rotten! LOL (They also think I plant hanging baskets of perselane to provide them a soft, spongy nest with a view! LOL) |
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