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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla 
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My heart my tears my fears are all coming true i knew that i wouldent be able to be with you,the lies the lies the misdirections. your heart isnt wanting for me no it just a deception. My eyes my faith my own reflection I can barely look at me THe dark comes down it carries me whole my sould drains into my own dementions stray me to the hole of yesterday years where all the troubles were in a box of cookies unedited |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Moral, and even legal implications and complications still do not deter humans away from primal impulses... One can be extremely happy with their present mate, and still the urge of ages punishes by pushing the biological envelope. Even when our better judgement warns of the results ... As you say.... "i knew that i wouldent be able to be with you," Nature is deceptive... "the lies the lies the misdirections." " your heart isnt wanting for me no it just a deception." Nature allows this because its job is to spread genes around in every possible direction...imo But the psyche is trained in the modern sense, and bars the bliss from being absorbed and accepted...Society lays on guilt for many reasons and so one shrinks into themselves after offending it (to a place of healing) "THe dark comes down it carries me whole my sould drains into my own dementions" Returning to the sexless place of childhood to take refuge and heal? "stray me to the hole of yesterday years where all the troubles were in a box of cookies " I wonder why there are as yet no replies to this? Perhaps it is a touchy subject that many have wrestled with, and so it is read and passed over without comment? Unedited or not, the short stanzas are strong and to the point, a little tweaking and it will become a very good poem... ____________ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
a marvelous depiction of what we all have felt, agree with ice, back up to the top you go...for all to read |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
thank you very much guys. Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
I must agree with the others on this read. :-) |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
thank's guys Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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