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Winter Walk One
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Winter Walk One |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
As snow falls And fall And fills all the lands, I bundle myself in black leather Gloves and coat against the weather Blowing ~~o blowing across the street ~~* snowing into my face ~~o walking no one to greet ~~* people gone to there place As feet trudge And trudge Trudging through the deep white Nowhere or when to be this night Night Oo~ Snow and darkness blending **~ Gray pulled apart chilling Oo~ down falls never ending **~ holes and cracks it’s filling I circled a block And another Then home Covered cold white I did roam Gloom |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Smiling at the oo's and o's and the snows and wishing for a snowday... hot chocolate, chili, and a bunch of sled riders! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I love winter walks, I too, have a black leather coat and gloves, but I like to walk with someone to keep warm ~  This poem flowed so well, the words fell so softly from my lips, like the snow falling itself from your poem! Soft and warm, even though it was about winter... ~Love and Hugs ~ARH We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, miscellanea, T’was my attempt to add motion to the words Pleased you enjoyed it Thank you, A Romantic Heart, I tried to take the demon/cat with me But he saw over six inches of snow on the ground outside the door And refused Him with a fur coat. It was an interesting walk Pleased you liked the poetic result Now for a little mulled wine Gloom |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
LOL..demon cat, cats are picky. Well,I would have joined you, even though I don't own a fur coat and Iwould like to share that bottle of wine, pour me a glass please....I'll be right over! Your words contain motion already, but I like how you displayed your words, nice added touch~class ~Love and Hugs ~ARH We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I thought you were trying to add pause and fluctuation...movement/vibration. Thanks for clarifying. |
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