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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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I twisted my thoughts so they would form a straight line define in tangible terms why you hated me so much why I could never love you enough and how it was that silence always won the arguments we never argued and the things we always meant to say never got said instead they unraveled these thoughts leaving fragmented unanswered questions that there really isn’t an answer to I cock my head to one side and watch my dogma chase its proverbial tail retwisiting my thoughts again and again until finally exhausted I sleep ~SEA~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
why you hated me so much why I could never love you enough and how it was that silence always won the arguments we never argued and the things we always meant to say never got said God Lady Sea, I do know this... it aches too. I wish no one to ever have to know this ache. Hugs. You are special yanno??  choose to chance the rapids, dare to dance the tides... {Garth} |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you just wrote me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SEA All paths lead to an end, not to worry. Good write |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord, I so relate to this because you just described a monumental period of my life. |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Why Why? Why do they make us feel this way. Like its our fault and we should be the one to blame if it doesn't workout. Twisting everything we say and everything we are thinking. Urrggg I could rip him apart he will always be a piece of sh** and always putting someone else down to make him feel better. Sorry this poem got to me in exactly what is going on right now. Thank you for revealing what I shouldn't be feeling.  I am just venting, I am going through a really hard time right now. Great poem SEA. [This message has been edited by Cloud 9 (02-14-2005 02:46 PM).] |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Re-twist your-self happy dear Sea..sigh ..the ache in this falls off the page begging for open arms to catch it....heart hugssss ... you tug my heart....  ~~*~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
why I could never love you enough and how it was that silence always won the arguments we never argued and the things we always meant to say never got said ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ you seem to be writing for many with this one girlie.... powerful, honest.... very well done dear poetess. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminded me of a few relationships I've been involved in...the cure is to get out...James |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
james- Exactly!!!! That's where I am at. I made a mistake of taking him back and didn't last a week. After four years, I have finally learned my lesson..... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, I am surprised...thanks all for the kind words, I'm sorry it rings true for so many...Cloud nine...I'm really sorry you know this...sad no one warned you of how he was. Hopefully things will get better for you. I wrote this actually for my brother in law who very recently has split with his wife, her choice, not his. He is a good man and it hurts me to see him go through this. I have been there, but have long since gotten over it....thank goodness I am very lucky to be married to a wonderful man. *hugs* for all of you and yes, James, you are so right  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sea, I also have known this before. When you give all the love you have to give and it's just never enough...intil you have no more to give. Yet, you keep trying to please the person. I am so glad that my relationship with my honey-love isn't like that. He loves the way I love him...just as I love the way he loves me.  Good writing, sweetie. Hugs,  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I can only nod with familiarity. it's the unresolved that seeds the nightmare, Sue *hearthugs* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good grief, been there and done it too - we all have to really smarten up I think.  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you ladies.... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!! Eric |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice! JL |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hi Sea! This feeling fits me so well. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Honey...oh do I remember some talks we had...about writing, about how you could express yourself... remember? Yeah, me too.  Mama K |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow you must of been in my soul today feeling this myself, i am so tired of the twisting of words, turning all around, rewritting history, never them, its us women, never ending battle, yes i understand it can be other way around, tonight i am just writting it off as they just know who is more intelligent, more wiser, more understanding, more loving, stronger, and they just envy strong women, so they twist and turn to make us them, it cant happen, i just spent three days of it, after getting out of 14 years of it, its their problem , sending a big hug your way and one for your family thanks |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"I twisted my thoughts so they would form a straight line define in tangible terms why you hated me so much why I could never love you enough and how it was that silence always won the arguments we never argued and the things we always meant to say never got said" Damn... how did I miss that. Are you in my head this evening? Wonderful write and  |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Sea, I know this only too well my friend, what was there leaves, what is left is a couple that is lost yet craving to be found again, sometimes the fight might be the good thing, but it gets to a stage where even one word is the hardest thing to say. Goodluck, it is why we write and share, it is how we survive and go on. Great write here Sea, shows that you and I are not alone with these thoughts and unspoken words. Sleep well my friend. Sincerely Rick |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! How did I miss this excellent excellent write!! Hugs YOU!! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
I've been there........more times than I'd like to have been I'm afraid. Great write Sea!  Regret not that which you have done, |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
most excellent, this - SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is awesome... "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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