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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{And this} Under black sky I sleep to empty dreams pressed like a butterfly to glass in stillness sings the blue of winds and shadows meet the coming fog & mist through light in breath, I inhale to know the heart of you is close that I could bleed across empty sky and endless night to remember the edge of two souls the heart-beat will ache to hold the contour of grey for this tiny dancer in arms of gold sketching the remains in dust and sand so that when it rains, I will stand at the window to trace the trickle of spiral water, and know it is the edge of you tucked behind my eyes I will await this day in colored view and pray dragonflies will lay softly across quiet times playing summer nights in warm air thinking of your softness and how it reminds me ~ I can not breathe when you are not here ~~**~~ {I-M-D}just because ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"so that when it rains, I will stand at the window to trace the trickle of spiral water, and know it is the edge of you tucked behind my eyes" * "thinking of your softness and how it reminds me ~ I can not breathe when you are not here" wow...wow...wow....LOVED this!! You are one amazing lady...  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
offering a gentle hug and a sigh |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very good...choice of words inspired...thank you.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
This is so very beautiful. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
  sis... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful write lovely lady~ And the closing lines..? WOW!!! Hugs~ ~ The most beautiful poem ever written.. was written by you in my heart ~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
never ever is there a time, when I click on your name, and I'm left feeling like the lion who has just been given courage, heart and awareness... This was a tremendous read... Hugs to you sweet lady |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I have never told you this.. but, everytime, without fail, when I read your words there is always at least one line, one word so well placed that it causes me to catch my breath. *nodding* yep... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thank you all....for taking time to read and for your heartfelt replies....muwwwahhhhs and hugsssss ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*sigh* always beautifully you |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lovely Lauren  Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...this is so beautiful! Eric |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Exquisite Lauren ! hugs, Chris Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Greeneyes, Immediately I was enveloped by these fragile words. "Under black sky I sleep to empty dreams pressed like a butterfly to glass" ~miscellanea |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"I can not breathe when you are not here" Oh, you are a poet after my own heart! Rf |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in breath, I inhale to know the heart of you is close that I could bleed across empty sky and endless night to remember the edge of two souls ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ sketching the remains in dust and sand so that when it rains, I will stand at the window to trace the trickle of spiral water, and know it is the edge of you tucked behind my eyes ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ time and again your write the emotions that I have pushed deep and no longer try to turn into verse, and as always you do it in your delicate, unique, style. lovely lovely write poetess L.  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh Jesus, Lauren: I could bleed across empty sky and endless night to remember the edge of two souls I know that feeling of not being able to breathe . . . |
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Opoetry4me Member
since 2002-10-11
Posts 126Dixon, Ky USA |
Gosh... Isn't it nice to breath instead of gasp. Lovely poem! |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
amazing. i could feel the flow to this in my bones. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
not yet able to exhale after reading these words ..... .... and turning many shades of blue. breathless |
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