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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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liar... liar... liar... Whispered or screamed, such accusation is hollow echo a mad refrain battering my brain, slipping the skin from my bones. liar... liar... leave... Endlessly I packed meaningless mementos but my suitcase was still empty as I walked out the door, turning my back on all that went before, Knowing it followed anyway. liar... you are... nothing... How does your voice reach from the grave, turning my dreams into screams that leave me meaningless, disappearing in the echoes of a fiercely whispered NO |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I don't know, but this reminds me of a verbally abusive relationship! And I so understand how words can haunt one's soul. Hugs, suthern gal~ |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Yes!!! I love it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you never forget certain things  this aches dear lady |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Oh this does hurt to read....excellent poetry is often called beautiful....no, not this time -- just excellent, but with things behind it which leave the B-word meaningless. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Suthern, aches my heart to read, so what is it doing to your kind soul? best marty |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Wow! What a punch - well done - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Endlessly I packed meaningless mementos but my suitcase was still empty ~*~ These are the strongest lines, m'dear... strong, clear, and full of knowing. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Such intensity, suthern! May I amplify a phrase better suited for you? "You are something, a real special SOMEBODY." Well written, bringing out a subtle fury in me. Very often I can easily end a response and commence reading a different poem. Not this time--this sticks. miscellanea |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
You have penned this so well. Hard story, and a sad situation. JL  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How does your voice reach from the grave, turning my dreams into screams that leave me meaningless, disappearing in the echoes of a fiercely whispered NO Best closing I've ever seen you write, suthern gal. Suitcase filled with meaningless mementos and it's still empty...you have some wonderful visuals and lines in the poem...wow. Beyond impressed here.....  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Read Balladeer again, it's what I would have said had I his talent. Have a good day. and another WOW from me. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ I'm joining the 'wowsers' on this piece~ Emotion flowing intensely here~ Take this and wear it tightly~Love you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This packs some wordpower~~~ It's always good to get it out, isn't it? M |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Great write - sounds to me the person is on the right track now.  What's past is prologue. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"liar"... we have the same dreams... being lied to is the one thing I will not, ever, put up with...at least anymore. (my "suitcase" was empty as well..and when I realized it, it made the trip so much easier)."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah lady how odd that dreams can take on the form of friend or foe....and this one is not a friend...bid it begone, embrace it no more..... as said above, most poetry of this calibur is excellent and beautiful, this is excellant........sigh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Blues, Cloud & PS: Thank you so very much, kind ladies! *S* Jamie: You’re right… no beauty here. *S* Thank you, my friend - so much. *S* latearrival & miscellanea: I could hug you both for your responses… thank you so very much! Susan & JL: Thank you for your kind acceptance – it means a lot to me! *S* Sunshine, Bal & Seymour: Thank you very much for finding lines to your liking. *S* Marge & Mysteria: Thank you very much! Susan C & nakdthoughts & jellybeans: I thank you all very much for your kind comments! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Endlessly I packed meaningless mementos but my suitcase was still empty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ as always Im the tardy moth power piercing write here... this style suits your pen well...the formatting added an extra punch to your poignant expression...well done poetess of the mighty pen. one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
a screaming whisper, indeed! powerful! Rf |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JM: How can a post be tardy... when it came just at the right time... and said just the right thing. *S* Thank you so much! *S* Robert: Thank you very much! *S* vandana: I'm glad - thank you! *S* |
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