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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-06-28 07:09 AM


it is the other side of you
with the messed up hair
and candy sticky left over
that is never finished

that makes me want to
build a fence around
your playground daydreams
and charge admission

to the crows on the tree
that sweat while waiting
for your birdbath to fill
from the raindrops you make

when you dance your mountains
under the cloud bellies
just enough to make them hungry
and their saliva shimmers

on your brim like viscid permission


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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-06-28 07:38 AM


you do her a wonderful justice my friend..

good morning way over there, from here.
Hugs.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-06-28 07:48 AM


love that is never finished, is the art all mankind dreams of...if only in small particles, and is truly what life is...nurtured in the womb of the muses...just for us, if only we'd see and remember the senses of such...

you always know what the human soul longs for...

Sunshine
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3 posted 2005-06-28 08:22 AM



You do seem protective, that way...

but do make sure the gate swings freely...


SEA
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with you
4 posted 2005-06-28 08:45 AM


makes me think of raindances and puddles...




enjoyed

Martie
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5 posted 2005-06-28 09:34 AM


DS..You show beautiful heart in this!  
nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2005-06-28 10:34 AM


build a fence around
your playground daydreams


I always enjoyed the way you put your words together

M

Cloud 9
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7 posted 2005-06-28 11:00 AM


MMMMM! My morning coffee..
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2005-06-28 11:36 AM


DarkOne~
This is brilliant penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

soul drifter
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9 posted 2005-06-28 02:13 PM


Really lovely. Archivin'...

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

Pilgrimage
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10 posted 2005-06-28 02:29 PM


I like that image, the playground daydreams.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Susan
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11 posted 2005-06-28 03:16 PM


Mmmmmmmm - lovely imagery d-


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