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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Fun House Lore I am threading the design my eyes closed feeling my way within the air of your voice what choice to take this tired eagle I am and touch a feather or two to you to feel the flying still vibrating true It can be so long to the ridge of sky the way is how I want to fly and the glass at the end gets bigger a mirror on and on of me scared and wanting out around I go in bumping into myself again maybe there is no end In and out and in I remember the din of laughter and music so sweet sometimes I just want to rock down to my back and do the sway the swing I lack I am holding on to one true thing just me and I and then again within I used to be out of tune but now I just don’t care if I blare and beep or even call out-loud some crazy bird will hear me and investigate maybe even start a riot by the tall tree with me still seeing with my eyes shut hands out in want of you in braille but what if I fail? [This message has been edited by Balladeer (07-03-2005 12:18 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Fail? ~*~ I am holding on to one true thing just me and I and then again within ~*~ Don't think it's possible to fail, sweetie... because when we try, the only failure might be is within our own mind. But that you try, proves you didn't truly fail yourself... Now, again...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"bumping into myself again" Once? I broke a mirror for that very reason--but then there was just that much more of me...  love you sweet marite |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"...but what if I fail?" You can not. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Failure you say? Failure is a blessing that invokes us to achieve greater results. SG |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
Awesome write my friend. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie fail? oh hell no you are incredible love this and you mxx Oh, you speak to me in riddles |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I love the analogy, Martie! You will not fail! ....jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What a trip through desperation this poem is -- lost in the funhouse is no place to be, whether you're a kid or a grownup....and you capture the oh-my-god of it, as it can come to us in life far away from any carnival....beautifully conceived and written. But even at the risk of sounding simple-minded and shallow... .....perhaps all you really need to do is, stop this frantic chasing and let a grown-up rescue you...it means you'd have to trust someone, but even that isn't impossible, you know, even in the funhouse -- take it from one who knows. And if you fail....you'll stop, and presently someone will come for you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a write well done wonderfully said |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You dress up your thoughts and put them on stage for me to to enjoy and then simply stand back and applaud~  You are poetry~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
a mirror on and on of me scared and wanting out around I go in bumping into myself again maybe there is no end Having fallen into a House of Horrors where there is an end but no relief, this turns me inside out with knowing the confusion and fear... I wish better days and a peaceful heart for you... this is a fantastic write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Some fun house mirrors aren't all they're cracked up to be!  Seriously speaking, Marvellous Martie, please remember that "Failure" is an "F" word! ~ and you, Dear One, will always be a success in whatever you do! You have a talent extraordinaire! Sending you a humongous hug of love, Linda  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
It can be so long to the ridge of sky the way is how I want to fly and the glass at the end gets bigger a mirror on and on of me scared and wanting out around I go in bumping into myself again maybe there is no end a true to life write that you describe so well with images life like what if you fail? Maybe failure is a new beginning? I prefer to call it stumbling...but in your case, darlin...your humble qualities and caring heart, will keep you on course...love...Lee J. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
with me still seeing with my eyes shut hands out in want of you in brail ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh man........... oh how I wish I had wrote that.... talk about defining the need.... awesome introspective write dear poetess. Writers try to capture the exhilaration of Nature & inspiration of Love. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - lots of substance here with lots to ponder - you write so wonderfully - hope your seeking found helpful results - Paul [This message has been edited by Goodknight (07-03-2005 07:23 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"I am holding on to one true thing just me and I and then again within" The whole idea is very nicely put across Martie. Eric |
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